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since 2000-01-25
Posts 33
elsinore, ca, usa

0 posted 2000-02-01 03:09 PM

I don't know why you hold me back
My writings not something like "crack"
I live life and learn
I'm a teen with no concern,
Bad language!
Least of our worries..
How do we express our selves with boundries
And rules
Why must you put limits on my feelings told..


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since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
1 posted 2000-02-01 03:29 PM

very nice! loved it! keep it up! I'm sure marilyn will be impressed too!  
Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
2 posted 2000-02-01 04:20 PM

ryun:  this is a good poem, but concerning it's sentiment: marilyn said those things because it is her job to do so... she has been given the responsibility of keeping order and maintaining decency in the teen forum (and i, for one, think she does it well)... as for my feelings on profanity: see my post on your other poem...

sincerely and with no ill will,
jerome the boy with no brain

 A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!

since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
3 posted 2000-02-01 04:24 PM

Like wise....  Jerome knows my standpoint is the same!
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271

4 posted 2000-02-01 05:34 PM

i agree with ya ryun, though i'm not much for cursing, overall you do have a good point.  I think some in here a the slightest bit uptight. but if it wasn't for dancin' around pointless rules it'd get boring *L*

 "Which is the dream?"


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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2000-02-01 06:49 PM

Now this I like! You expressed yourself very well and with no vulgarity. Very well done ryun.

I am not the one limiting you young man. All I am here to do is make sure you follow the guidelines (with you agreed to do when registering on this site). If you did not read the guidelines and the rules of the site before you registered, it is not my fault. We come into Ron's home when we come to this board. All he asks is some common respect. Wipe your feet on the mat, keep your mouth clean and get along with his other guests. If you do not wish to do so you know where the door is.

I do not know how many other poetry sites you have been to but many have free for all rules. They are ugly and hateful and disrespectful. We have many poets come to us from those boards because we have a rule about common respect. If you would like to post any one of those boards and see what it is like I am sure I can find a address for you. Let me know what you think.



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