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KiKi
Junior Member

since 2000-01-30

Posts 15

0 posted 2000-01-31 11:03 PM

She-
For you I would lay my life on the line..
For you I would do anythin you asked..
For you I would stop my heart from beating..
For you I would wait forever for your touch..

I hope you would do the same

For you I would ditch my closest friends..
For you I would break anothers heart..
For you I would die..
For you I would do anything to please you..

I hope you would do the same

He-
For you I would not ask you to do anything..
For you I would do everything you said..
for you I would not take you away from your friends.
For you I would doa anything to save you...

I would not ask you to do the same

For you I would lose a close friend...
For you I would not ask you to do the same..
For you I would stand up for you at every moment..
for you I would hold you at every chance..

I would not ask you to do the same

Mistikman
Senior Member

since 2000-01-10

Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA

1 posted 2000-01-31 11:11 PM

First of all, let me start off by saying great poem. I really enjoyed it.
Maybe I am overanalyzing this, but why is it that the guy in the poem wants the girl to bend to his will and be just the way he wants her, but the girl is willing to accept the guy no matter what? They both seem deeply in love with each other, but they are both falling into roles that many have been trying to disintigrate for years. The girl seems to be portrayed as somewhat weak, willing to bend to the will of the guy, and the guy is the strong one making the girl into what he wants her to be.
Or am I reading the poem backwards? When it says She-, is it the guy talking to the girl? because that is the way I interpreted it

I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

KiKi
Junior Member

since 2000-01-30

Posts 15

2 posted 2000-01-31 11:15 PM

ok I will explain
She- means the girl is talking and he- is the boy talking
SORRY for the misunderstanding!!
I wrote that so long ago that I didn't even read it over to make changes!!

Mistikman
Senior Member

since 2000-01-10

Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA

3 posted 2000-01-31 11:19 PM

Ok, hrm, that makes my analysis of it really wrong, heh, cool poem anyway

I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

Penelope
Junior Member

since 2000-01-26

Posts 31

4 posted 2000-01-31 11:27 PM

I really like this poem and I can't help but sit here and try to figure out which of the 'characters' I would be more like. It's quite thought provoking actually. I think I'd be the one who wouldn't expect the other to feel the same way- but I'd still be disappointed if they didn't.

I love your work, can't wait to read some more.

-Penny

My advice in life is; talk to yourself, you never know what you'll learn.

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