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ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin

0 posted 1999-10-20 02:38 AM


A kiss, so sweet
like magic glows
our lips, to meet
the feeling grows

The warmth, so close
I feel it now
this little dose
to me endowed

What do I feel?
my mind is blank
is this for real?
these blinding ranks?

Your lips to mine
so soft and wet
there is no "time"
in this "duet"

Cant see, cant think
cant breath or know
just for that "blink"
it stops the "show"

You just cant miss
you've set me free
with the little kiss
you've given me

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Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be

© Copyright 1999 B.J.Howe - All Rights Reserved
Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

1 posted 1999-10-20 10:00 AM


Nothing like a Kiss to stop time! Well done.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Pepper
Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
2 posted 1999-10-20 11:10 AM


Very sweet.....brought a smile to my lips Thunder.....

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 1999-10-20 11:53 AM


Thunder..the imagery in this one brought a smile to my face. The rhythm and rhyme are both perfect. Well done!

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This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides

ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
4 posted 1999-10-20 10:48 PM


Watcher666 - Thank you very much

Pepper - Thank you, Im glad to hear it.

Hoot - Thank you very much as well...I am glad to make you smile too

Your comments and replies are greatly appreciated, Thanks much!

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Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be

Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

5 posted 1999-10-21 12:18 PM


Well done! I think you captured the feeling accurately - it only time could stop!
Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

6 posted 1999-10-21 01:50 AM


ThunderKyss, loved this, I agree with Hoot, just perfect

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
7 posted 1999-10-21 06:16 PM


Severn and Dark Angel... Thank you both very much for the comments. Greatly appreciated
Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

8 posted 1999-10-23 09:52 PM


Yep, this is sweet!

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Denise

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