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Martie
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0 posted 1999-10-20 12:10 PM



When evening comes
we check the doors and windows
twice, three times as
the elm that held the sun
turns its back
and dark leaves moan.

We lock ourselves in
against the black sky,
check the doors and windows
twice, three times.
The elm scratches at the
window
we listen
sure of the creatures
hiding
just beyond the bed.

The elm clutches
at the lamppost
we check the doors and windows
twice, three times.
We cannot lock out
the monsters of the night,
born in childhood nightmares.
They wake while we sleep
sure of the child
still in us.

© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 1999-10-20 12:23 PM


Excellent, Martie. The last line is perfection. We all carry those monsters from our childhood in us and the childish fears remain, regardless of our age. Well done.
Andrew Scott
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2 posted 1999-10-20 12:55 PM


And I heard a rap rap rapping at my door... damn the wind anyhow!
A fine read for this time of the year Martie... This is my kind of horror. Thanks for sharing.

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
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3 posted 1999-10-20 10:11 AM


Well done! Liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
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4 posted 1999-10-20 10:28 AM


An excellent piece Martie!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Iloveit
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5 posted 1999-10-20 10:51 AM


like this much martie, really well done
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 1999-10-20 11:57 AM


Martie, this is a grat piece of writing, the attention to detail, the repetition of one, two, three for locking windows, doors. The final lines the icing on this cake. I liked it and it truly liked me
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