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Night Things |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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When evening comes we check the doors and windows twice, three times as the elm that held the sun turns its back and dark leaves moan. We lock ourselves in against the black sky, check the doors and windows twice, three times. The elm scratches at the window we listen sure of the creatures hiding just beyond the bed. The elm clutches at the lamppost we check the doors and windows twice, three times. We cannot lock out the monsters of the night, born in childhood nightmares. They wake while we sleep sure of the child still in us. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent, Martie. The last line is perfection. We all carry those monsters from our childhood in us and the childish fears remain, regardless of our age. Well done. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
And I heard a rap rap rapping at my door... damn the wind anyhow! A fine read for this time of the year Martie... This is my kind of horror. Thanks for sharing. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Well done! Liked this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
An excellent piece Martie! ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
like this much martie, really well done  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Martie, this is a grat piece of writing, the attention to detail, the repetition of one, two, three for locking windows, doors. The final lines the icing on this cake. I liked it and it truly liked me |
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