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Elder Speak [Dedicated to YOU, the Poet] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Elder Speak A little time disconnects us, oh my Elder dear, I duly share with you now all my hopes and fears for you have reached an age and solemn wisdom wise may you now answer my repeated “how’s” and “why’s.” Though you may not speak, nor nod your graying head I’ll garner your gifted wisdom before I seek my bed, that you have in your experience, and know there be par none, for I shall not rebuild proved wheels, less they be undone. In your hands I lay my fears of life that lies ahead, to you I bare my heart, my soul’s torn tears now shed, through your stories I listen, learn, map my own road home, from you I value great your thoughts deep within your dome. Your words are truly gifts, none finer I’ve ever sought for declarations made by you can only thus be taught; oh Elder one, wise and aged, take me in your care, reveal to me your treasures fine, treasures that are rare. Now the wind is at my back, time leads the sun to dusk withered hands shaped your words, body brittle, emptied husk, your former life gives shape to mine, a treasure trove is bound; Pray you sire, be it known in your love of life, my soul’s re-found. And promise now, in deep October winds, as you lay your head, revelations from deep within will stand within your stead. As young ones come to me, your wisdom will common bond as aged be I, thus share with them, truth Elder once leaned on. 18 October, 1999 ©KRJ ------------------ Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
One of your best Sunshine...Brava, my friend! ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Oh my Sunshine! Such wonderful work, my friend!! ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderful work Sunshine  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Caroline, Pepper and Hoot. I love it best when the thoughts for pieces are "just there...", don't you? |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The best I've seen from you, Sunshine. A work to be proud of. |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
A professional piece by far. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Bravo Sunshine. Great work. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
To my Elders and my Youngers, I salute YOU all! Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm enjoying this one myself. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This liked me. Really it did!! Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful, Sunshine! ------------------ Denise |
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Serraley Junior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 11New Zealand |
I loved it... beautiful and lyrical and very thought-provoking. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Nocht, denise, thank you very much for reading. Serraley, welcome, new member, and thank you for reading this and posting a response. I'm very happy that you found beauty in this piece. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Don't know how I missed this one before, Sunshine. This is wonderful. Michael |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I second Michael..(and the others), very good work gal.....After I die and I'm reincarnated, I'm gonna be able to write like this! (Then again, I may come back as a bug or something, and yanno that would give Balladeer something to be really happy about). |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Michael, having you drag this from the archives really lifted my spirits, and Toe, I know your words are more profound than some folks think, so thank you both for reading, and commenting. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Wooooo Hoooooo Sunshine.. doing Kansas proud... great job!!! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Wow Sunshine, this is.....absolutely wonderful ! : ) |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Well, I really AM lacking now! Almost let this one slip through my fingers! As stated above...this is a wonderful piece. Nice work!!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm so glad that you found this to be a whoohoo, Mike, and see, look, a Wow from Munda!, and a full catch by Sally! Thank you for coming by! |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Truely beautiful SunShine, and oh-so-true. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, Lynn. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what would we do without you? |
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