Open Poetry #3 |
The Walk |
Sunshine
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The Walk Moonlight walks under a polished silver plate. The curves of the sand meet your feet. Golden thunder on the fluid air meets your ears. Tranquility surrounds you in a blanket, the seagull cries “trespasser” and flies away. The barrier of sound is broken, you watch the silver-steel bird continue its journey into darkness. A path is lit for someone to travel on the restless and wild blue water. Someone spilled sugar crystals on the cobalt blanket above ~ and shadows are hidden as the silver plate illuminates them. Circa 1968 ©KRJ 28 September, 1999 ------------------ Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Denise
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Beautiful, Sunshine! Thanks for the walk! ------------------ Denise |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You will never know how much I needed this quiet walk in the sand tonight! Thank you. |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I feel serenity reading this work. Nice. |
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Sunshine
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Denise, Poet, Balladeer, thank you for your comments. Amazing how poetry is ageless. |
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Alicat Member Elite
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Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Sunshine, thank you. I could smell the salt air and hear the keening of aggravated gulls. Alicat |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
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Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Excellent imagery!! |
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Sunshine
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Thank you Ali and Hoot...I thought perhaps this would be viewed as sophomoric, but the responses say otherwise. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
very lovely Sunshine...I loved the walk too...... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Michael
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This poem just kind of lulls you away into a dreamstate. Love the "silver plate" imagery. ------------------ Michael Anderson May Darkness find you all through the day. |
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Sunshine
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Thank you Pepper, and Michael, for reading. Seeing my "old stuff" has been quite a joy! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, As mellow as jello, beautiful read |
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caroline Senior Member
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Sunshine, this is one of the best walks I've ever had! ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Sunshine
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Sy, you've commented before that I'm jello ~ so now the question is asked, "what flavor?" Thanks, Caroline, for walking with me! |
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suthern
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Posts 20723Louisiana |
Just what a hectic day needed... lovely! |
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Sunshine
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Thank you so much suthern. I do miss the beach for the walks...and its sounds, and the salt air... |
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Martie
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Posts 28049California |
You really know how to turn a phrase--this was lovely. |
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Sunshine
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Thank you Martie! I've enjoyed your work as well. |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Sunshine...This was a great Walk!!!! Jenny |
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