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It Ain't All About You, Baby
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It Ain't All About You, Baby |
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Don Juan de Feu Junior Member
since 1999-10-15
Posts 25 |
It Ain't All About You, Baby He mused, preparing to explain, "Are you not pleased with your surprise?" At once, she started to complain to whine up, loudly to the skies her oft rediculous refrain about all lovers and their lies... to himself, he thought, just maybe it ain't all about you, baby! It had started out much better, with them cooing at each other's little tidbits nought would fetter, about their passion's heated druthers. Then he decided he would let her have the say both dad's and mother's, to himself, he thought, just maybe this ain't all about you, baby! Relationships sometimes wander in paths unknown to either friend, yet, they both the future squander, before full bloom, a bitter end. Tho his wish in love to bond her, a return she could never send, to himself, he thought, just maybe that ain't all about you, baby! Deciding to be on his way to greener pastures he might find, he allowed her a final say, a parting chance to speak her mind. Her sad response was to display questions still, about ties that bind; to himself, he thought, just maybe life ain't all about you, baby! --Don Juan de Feu . . . . Poems From the Goober Tree http://nathoo.wustl.edu/goober_tree.htm [This message has been edited by Don Juan de Feu (edited 10-15-1999).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I like this - it flows very well and I can see it set to music. Great work! |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Great poem, for some reason, I thought of Frank Sinatra singing this! BABY!hehe! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Welcome to passions |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I could see this as a song too, perhaps because of the refrain that is repeated. It read so true and natural like a good poem should. More please. |
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Don Juan de Feu Junior Member
since 1999-10-15
Posts 25 |
thank you Severn, A Romantic Heart, hoot_owl_m and Martie for your generous remarks! DJdeFeu |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Well done...liked this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another good one, Don! ------------------ Denise |
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Don Juan de Feu Junior Member
since 1999-10-15
Posts 25 |
ty ty ty watcher! smoooooooches denise!! DJ |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Love the attitude in this piece  Well done!------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I too, appreciate the attitude of this work Dom.Very enjoyable read! ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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