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The Surrender (from villanelle workshop)
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The Surrender (from villanelle workshop) |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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I dedicate this to all the folks who took the workshop with me, whose comments, suggestions, and praise made writing this worthwhile ... ya'll know who ya'll are!!  The Surrender Seductive and sublime the tender night: Caress of starlight holds me in its sway; Enchanted moon bespells my mortal sight. The noise of colour fades; this silvered light Becalms the clash of hues to soothing gray: Seductive and sublime, the tender night. Fair Luna, in her slow and graceful flight, Holds fast my gaze -- I cannot look away -- Enchanted moon bespells my mortal sight. In shadow robed, I mouth the darkling rite, Renouncing evermore the bane of day: Seductive and sublime the tender night. Celestial queen, her countenance alight With royal air, commanding me to stay: Enchanted moon bespells my mortal sight. This summons, I am powerless to fight: It beckons to my soul; I must obey. Seductive and sublime the tender night; Enchanted moon bespells my mortal sight. ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Enchanting Nocht. I love the visual of this piece. ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Nocht, I was really impressed with your final product, here. Truly and exquisite villanelle, (Like I'm really a judge), but in my eyes and knowing just what goes into these things now, a wonderful job. ------------------ Michael Anderson When God puts a tear in your eye, He puts a rainbow in your heart. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This was spellbinding, simply beautiful! Boy, you folks all did so well with these! Guess y'all did your homework!  ------------------ Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
As I already told you, this is wonderful. You did a wonderful job in class, I give you an A+...too bad I'm not the teacher, but I think Nan will agree |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Fantastic - love the imagery, Nocht. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Such praise from such poets is gratifying! Michael, I was beginning to wonder whether my little joke in the workshop had ticked you off ... LOL ... I'm glad to see that it didn't! As I wrote in the dedication, I appreciated your suggestions; though I didn't take them, they showed that you were taking an interest in my writing, and I appreciate that. hoot, you are a gem ... thank you so much for your input as well, and your subsequent praise ... it is always cherished, even if I forget to mention it. Severn, dsnyder and Pepper ... thanks for your replies ... I hope that this and the other great villanelles we produced for your enjoyment will entice you to join us in the next workshop (I think its going to be pantoums). The more the merrier! Nocht |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Fabulous read.Enjoyed it much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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