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Love's FLight (An attempt at a Villanelle from Nan's class)
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Love's FLight (An attempt at a Villanelle from Nan's class) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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I'd just like to say thanks to Nan for her patience in teaching us this form of poetry. I found it to be a challange and am not sure form poetry is for me as my words seem stunted when I write like this, but here is my humble attempt.) Love's Flight (A Villanelle) Drawn to her love's sweet light Once caged, now is set free She spreads her wings in flight Within the depths of night Where blind, she now can see Drawn to her love's sweet light There bathed in clouds of white In skies above the sea She spreads her wings in flight Life dim, now shinning bright No longer lost she'll be Drawn to her love's sweet light His love has won the fight Released and now set free She spreads her wings in flight Eyes opened in his sight Her soul released, set free Drawn to her love's sweet light She spreads her wings in flight ------------------ Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well Hoot, I think you did a humbley terrific job on this! This was great! Oops, shh! I forgot about that class. Thanks for the reminder. |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
I like the form. Is that a cyber class or do real people get together? Ohme |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Very nice, I enjoyed. You are a very talented poet. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Hoot, I don't think this sounds stunted at all. A challenge this may have been, but you completed it beautifully! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks everyone and although it's nice to attempt these formats from time to time, I think I'll stick to what comes out naturally Ohme...a cyber class here on Passions...check out Poetry Workshop |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, You did very well, don't think I could have done better. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
LOL - The stunted part is all your imagination, Ruth - It doesn't appear such at all - That's the real challenge....Hehe...  |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
hoot, liked it a lot, you did good girl |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Well written Hoot.....enjoyed this much.... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've been checking into the class as I can and have enjoyed reading everyone's learning process. I think you've made a wonderful first attempt, and hopefully you will regale us with future efforts. As Nan says, this is not stunted at all; you are must missing the freedom of "regular speech", as you do so well in your regular works, but I like this very, very much. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Beautifully done, Hoot, Well written, touching. btw thanks for your help on mine. ------------------ Michael Anderson When God puts a tear in your eye, He puts a rainbow in your heart. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Absolutely beautiful, Hoot! And I agree, it doesn't seem stunted at all! ------------------ Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Seymore...coming from you, that is high praise Nan...thanks again for your instructions, you're a good teacher I love it and pepper...thank you both Sunshine...thanks, give it a try sometime Michale...thanks and no need to thank me, that's what the class was for Denise...thank you |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Well done verse! Sweet and meaningful poem Dear Lady. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This was positively uplifting ... I enjoyed reading it the second time even more than the first. It is quite obvious that these sentiments came from your heart, and I have always held that the heart is the birthing-place of the greatest poetry every created. Just take the "an attempt at" out of the thread topic, and this will be perfect! ("Attempt" suggests that you failed, which you most certainly did not; your form is very well-done) Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Watcher...thank you very much Nochtdraco...you are far too kind, thank you |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I have always enjoyed your work and it has always touched my heart. This piece is no exception. It flows smoothly and it isn't stunted in the least. I enjoyed watching this piece come together and I an looking forward to more of Nan's classes. I hope to see you there as well. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Marilyn, unless she throws me out, I'll be there and thanks |
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