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Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15

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That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

0 posted 1999-09-30 03:01 AM

Was it merely the whims of Fate,
That flew me here on wings of hate?

Or perhaps I went left when I should have gone right.
Maybe I ran when it came time to fight.

That plastic smile and feet of clay
Still gnaw at my insides every day.

"Go back, go back," Screams the voice in my head.
But those thoughts are tethered with ropes of dread.

I say if I could, I'd change not a thing
'Tis the sad song liars like me sing

But I swallow the guilt like a bittersweet pill.
It wasn't my fault, this doubt I must kill.

For I know when I lie in bed, awake
I've heeded the powerful whims of Fate.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17

Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA

1 posted 1999-09-30 03:31 AM

This poem really made me think. It really hits home! Very good job!

~*~ Words can paint a picture that no artist can match! ~*~

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Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

2 posted 1999-09-30 03:32 AM

Escellent piece here, Sys. Quite powerful.

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Michael Anderson

May Darkness find you all through the day.

Dragoness
Senior Member

since 1999-08-07

Posts 513

3 posted 1999-09-30 03:44 AM

Very well done.Excellent!

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

U K Hero
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since 1999-08-08

Posts 266
England

4 posted 1999-09-30 04:14 AM

Some clever use of words here which ( have already been said) paint a clear picture well writen.

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

5 posted 1999-09-30 08:44 AM

Thanks everyone for the replies. cute picture Echo

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Iloveit
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since 1999-09-02

Posts 1121
NM

6 posted 1999-09-30 10:51 AM

I like this, a lot, whew, that 5th verse...the torment we put ourselves through, over the past, and where we are now, great writing

Sage Spirit
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since 1999-09-22

Posts 19
Derry, NH USA

7 posted 1999-09-30 11:18 AM

So true, so true man. It's amazing to me how lately so many people feel the same way as I. I guess I'm really not alone in a strange way.

Right On!!!

Sage Spirit

Pepper
Member Elite

since 1999-08-19

Posts 3079
Southern Florida

8 posted 1999-09-30 11:37 AM

excellent piece Amy.....speaks volumes.......

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

9 posted 1999-10-01 10:36 AM

I have heeded the powerful whims of fate !!
Awesome work here Dear...

Jenny

Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

10 posted 1999-11-03 06:38 PM

Thanks for replies.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

11 posted 1999-11-04 09:44 AM

Excellent....enjoyed this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

12 posted 1999-11-05 04:05 PM

So this is what you mean by fate. In some aspects, and in this situation. Excellent poem.

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

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In the space between moments

13 posted 1999-11-05 11:25 PM

Extremely powerful...I am awestruck.

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*Krista Knutson*

"To be great is to be misunderstood...." - Ralph Waldo Emerson

caroline
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since 1999-08-16

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14 posted 1999-11-06 10:33 AM

You really know how to pack a punch with words, SD! Really an awesome piece, here.

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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15 posted 2004-04-25 09:13 PM

well done

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