Open Poetry #3 |
The Whims of Fate |
Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Was it merely the whims of Fate, That flew me here on wings of hate? Or perhaps I went left when I should have gone right. Maybe I ran when it came time to fight. That plastic smile and feet of clay Still gnaw at my insides every day. "Go back, go back," Screams the voice in my head. But those thoughts are tethered with ropes of dread. I say if I could, I'd change not a thing 'Tis the sad song liars like me sing But I swallow the guilt like a bittersweet pill. It wasn't my fault, this doubt I must kill. For I know when I lie in bed, awake I've heeded the powerful whims of Fate. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
This poem really made me think. It really hits home! Very good job! ~*~ Words can paint a picture that no artist can match! ~*~ ------------------ ~*~ I write to know I am alive ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Escellent piece here, Sys. Quite powerful. ------------------ Michael Anderson May Darkness find you all through the day. |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Very well done.Excellent! ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
Some clever use of words here which ( have already been said) paint a clear picture well writen. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Thanks everyone for the replies. cute picture Echo ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
I like this, a lot, whew, that 5th verse...the torment we put ourselves through, over the past, and where we are now, great writing |
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Sage Spirit Junior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 19Derry, NH USA |
So true, so true man. It's amazing to me how lately so many people feel the same way as I. I guess I'm really not alone in a strange way. Right On!!! Sage Spirit |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
excellent piece Amy.....speaks volumes....... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
I have heeded the powerful whims of fate !! Awesome work here Dear... Jenny |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Thanks for replies. ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Excellent....enjoyed this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
So this is what you mean by fate. In some aspects, and in this situation. Excellent poem. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Extremely powerful...I am awestruck. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "To be great is to be misunderstood...." - Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
You really know how to pack a punch with words, SD! Really an awesome piece, here. ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well done |
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