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Denise
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0 posted 1999-10-13 12:14 PM


You are the center of the world
-At least in your own eyes
The sun, the moon, the distant stars
The clouds in yonder skys
Exist- you think- for only you
-You just don't realize
You are but dust - just like the rest
-Comes that a big surpise?
I'm overworked and overtaxed
-It's not worth my demise
To acquiesce to your each whim
-You know no compromise
Perhaps the problem's stunted growth
-A baby in disguise?
Perhaps your heart's a bit too small
-Might need a bigger size?
To ponder this - I'm not equipped
My best guess but surmise
I've had my say - perhaps too much
So now I'll summarize
The answer to your misery
-Within your soul it lies.






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Denise

© Copyright 1999 Denise - All Rights Reserved
Christopher
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1 posted 1999-10-13 12:20 PM


OOOOHHH!
Scary, and so true of many people I know. That's another pet peeve of mine, people who think they're "God's Gift..."
Good answer to it!

A Romantic Heart
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2 posted 1999-10-13 01:06 AM


I liked this one Denise, God wants us to be humble. Even our righteousness is but filthy rags! Great poem of humbleness!
Watcher666
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3 posted 1999-10-13 06:49 AM


Well done Dear Lady....very well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 1999-10-13 08:47 AM


Denise,
You sure told him off. I did'nt think that was in you? How so ever it is a great piece of writing. *L*

Munda
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5 posted 1999-10-13 10:35 AM


Well said and very well written too. : )
Iloveit
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6 posted 1999-10-13 11:12 AM


wow this is great, really love it
WhtDove
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7 posted 1999-10-13 01:16 PM


Denise you did a great job describing self-centeredness. If I spelled that correctly.
I know a few like that. The EGO gets in the way. I hope it helped you to write it down. I know sometimes just to write it will help so you're not fuming over it in your mind!
I've had a few of those. (((((HUGS)))))

WhtDove
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8 posted 1999-10-13 01:16 PM


oops, sorry!

[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 10-13-1999).]

Pepper
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9 posted 1999-10-13 01:28 PM


Well stated Denise....enjoyed this read

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Denise
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10 posted 1999-10-13 09:28 PM


Thank you one and all for your wonderful responses! What a surprise! I didn't think anyone would care for this!

And Seymour, I guess I don't have it in me! I've never spoken like this to anybody!(wished to a few times though!)

Thanks again, everybody!

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Denise

Isis
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11 posted 1999-10-14 01:58 AM


You surprised me Denise!! But pleasantly of course. Glad you got to exorcise those feelings. Well done!

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How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool?
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



Denise
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12 posted 1999-10-14 06:47 PM


Thank you, Isis, for reading and commenting!
(nothing wrong with a little surprise now and then, eh?!)

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Denise

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