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Brother ( A villanelle )
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Brother ( A villanelle ) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Brother ( A villanelle ) How do you say, was it good bad or fine? Close in youth, the rest aloof and away, We pressed our grapes and we tasted our wine. Now our basic day is spent in decline And in naivete I ask and say How do you say, was it good bad or fine? Bilious as the days may be, or indign I, in all sincerity do assay, We pressed our grapes and we tasted our wine. Life weather grey or gay a separate dine And although each served on a different tray, How do you say, was it good bad or fine? Grateful we should be, the fruits of our vine, We have passed our genetic D. N. A. We pressed our grapes and we tasted our wine. Our stays closes reign and anchors seek brine. Our children weigh their voyages today. How do you say, was it good bad or fine? We pressed our grapes and we tasted our wine. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I like....I like. I am having a time with my "vanilla" poem... errr I mean villanelle!!! RB ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Your words - like your D.N.A. - will live on forever! Another great one, Seymour.  ------------------ Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RobertB & Denice, I thank you both for the read and comments. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
After doing one of these myself, my hat's off to anyone that attempts them and especially to anyone who does as well as you have! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Agreed with ruth...great job... I think that's the first time I've seen DNA used in a poem! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Chris and Hoot, Thank you both two of my favouite writers. |
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