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Free Passage (Challange from RobertB)
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Free Passage (Challange from RobertB) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648
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Found in the mind's A universe A treasure trove With gems diverse! A wondrous land Of star-dust dreams So magical Its bright moon beams! Adventures grand Await the heart The passage - free So journey start! Explore new worlds Traipse hill and glen Perhaps a jaunt To 'way-back-when'! Upon great seas The soul can sail Chart any course No plan can fail! Be rich or poor life's circumstance Amongst the stars there - all can dance!  ------------------ Denise |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
What a vision! Love the use of those ! marks. Excellent. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
A vision indeed!! Well done as always Denise..------------------ How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool? ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Alright Denise!!!!!!!!!!!! Yippeeee RB ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Severn, Isis and Robert, thank you so much! ------------------ Denise |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Just Beautiful Denise. ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Thou who has given so much to me, give one thing more: a grateful heart. >George Herbert |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denice, Well done a keeper. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Julie and Seymour, thank you for reading and commenting! ------------------ Denise |
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H. Arlequin Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210 |
smooooooooooches Denise, kutgw!! HA |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Absolutely Lovely!! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, H.A. and Watcher! As always, I appreciate your reading and commenting!  ------------------ Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I love it |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks Hoot! ------------------ Denise |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
Well written ( as ever ). Short lines are the hardest to write and you have done it here so well. Craig ------------------ Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Exceeded the challenge. Great one D! |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Denise, I agree with Chris....short lines are very difficult, and this was wonderful. ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Craig, WhtDove and Sys for your kind comments! Wow, ya mean I did something that is difficult!!! *feeling so smart* hehehehehehe...seriously, it didn't seem difficult...but then again, what do I know!  Thanks again! ------------------ Denise |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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