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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The beginning Raised from heavens reap Raptures deep. A miracle Male. Drawn Of Dust and stone Naked Frail. Skin and bone Born Naive And Then There was EVE. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Says it all!  ------------------ Denise |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
really nice....and just think....I had a guy tell me in another forum, which I won't mention, that he thought one word lines were stupid and pointless. I think a one word line can say it all as you have demonstrated. RB ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise & RobertB, Glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for the comments |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Born naive and then there was Eve.....boy, does that say all that needs to be said! Good going, Sy. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I really enjoyed this piece of art! |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
I love the way the words tumble after each other, moving me through to the end of the poem. ------------------ It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Understatedly well done. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Well done...applauds!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
These hands are clapping, too! Well done, Seymour! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
To all my wonderful friends above I clap my hands for thee. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
more applause!! "And Then There was EVE"......love it Sy ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Pufalove Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 119Houston, Tx. USA |
"Ditto" to all the above. Oh, and that is why he made us second, he wanted to make sure he had it right! ------------------ O all ye powers that he implanted, Arise, keep silence no more; put forth the strength that he hath granted, your noblest work is to adore. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Every great artist makes a rough draft first...then there was Eve. The verse is so flowing. I really like it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pepper, Puf & sand, Clever wits all three. thank you all. |
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