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Skyfyre
Senior Member

since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

0 posted 1999-10-04 09:45 PM

Battlefield

Ah, Love! -- resplendent Valkyrie
Aloft on wings of gold,
Who scans this mortal battlefield
In search of spirits bold --

All men aspire to be the prize
Of your triumphant ride;
Though none can fathom whom you'll choose
And whom you'll cast aside.

So, armored well in loneliness
With fervent hopes, we vie
To capture the attention of
Your enigmatic eye.

Your chosen join the victor's feast
Within your hallowed Hall,
And drink the liquor of your blood
That holds their minds in thrall.

They toast the rush of victory --
An end to daily strife --
And you, whose touch released them from
The battlefield of life.

But when they think their battles won,
Upon the break of day
Valhalla manifests its curse:
Once more into the fray!

By then, the hapless victims of
Your dark, immortal spell,
You force them to defend their hearts
Or face the chill of Hel:

Unyielding and eternally
Combatants battle on;
In grim profession as their heart's
Untiring champion.

Beware this deadly maiden, and
Her grandiose charade:
She guards the gates of Paradise,
But wields a bitter blade!

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

[This message has been edited by Nochtdraco (edited 10-04-1999).]

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 1999-10-04 09:59 PM

Wow! This is an excellent piece of writing! The caliber of the talent that I find here at Passions is incredible! Again, this is incredible Nocht!

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Denise

Starith
Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 176
Leesburg, FL USA

2 posted 1999-10-04 10:07 PM

Beautiful. Simply beautiful. I like the imagery in this...I can almost dee the battle field and the golden wings glistening in the sun.

Star

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We are only truly apperciated after we are no more!

Julie
Senior Member

since 1999-08-20

Posts 739
Houston, TX

3 posted 1999-10-04 10:14 PM

Incredible! Talent just bubbling over.
Imagery, the parallel of the story...MAGNIFICENT.

caroline
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since 1999-08-16

Posts 1218
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4 posted 1999-10-04 10:52 PM

Nocht...what can I say? Well, besides stupendous, outstanding, excellent, awesome, brilliant....oh yeah..I LOVE IT!
Brava, poet!

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats

Skyfyre
Senior Member

since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

5 posted 1999-10-05 12:36 PM

Thanks all, for your words of encouragement ... I feel guilty accepting all this praise, since this poem essentially wrote itself ...

I have been reading an excellent work of fiction that takes its basis from Nordic mythology, and was inspired to write something about a Valkyrie ... but since the Valkyrie theme has been done in song and verse a thousand ways over the centuries, I figured I'd have to give it a twist to make it worth reading ... and what better parallel than love to capture folks' attention..?

Glad you liked it ... smile ... though I think deep in my soul I wanted to do one of those exhausting ballads ...

Nocht

Pepper
Member Elite

since 1999-08-19

Posts 3079
Southern Florida

6 posted 1999-10-05 12:47 PM

extraordinary piece Nochtdraco....Bravo!!!!!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

traveler
Member

since 1999-08-17

Posts 119

7 posted 1999-10-06 01:02 PM

Another moving poem ... and how bitter the blade?

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