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Don't Make Me A Promise
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Don't Make Me A Promise |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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Don't make me a promise you'll never follow through. Don't promise me the sun, then bring me morning's dew. Don't promise me life, when I see but decay. Don't promise me the road, cause I'll find my own way. Don't promise me full love, when you can only give some. Don't promise me you'll be there, when you really can't come. Don't promise me everything, for some I will settle. Don't promise me the rose, then bring me the petal. Don't promise me first, when I fit in the middle. Don't promise me much, when I want so little. ------------------ ~*~ I write to know I am alive ~*~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Echo....this is WONDERFUL!! You rhythm and rhyme are flawless in this piece, it has such a natural flow to it and reads so smoothly. You should be very proud with this piece. Oh, yes and I almost forgot, great message to!! |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
I ditto what hoot said. Perfect flow. You got it girl!  ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Thou who has given so much to me, give one thing more: a grateful heart. >George Herbert |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
oooh i like it!! ------------------ "If to rectify your demeanor, You must imitate another, Your philosiphy on morality Is a burden on your mentality, Your actions based on popularity, Will never fulfill you internally, Cuz the world was not blessed with equality, But rather with fake geniality. --823-- |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Ruth...Thank you kindly! Julie...Thank you kindly too! Star...Thank you kindly as well! ------------------ ~*~ I write to know I am alive ~*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is absolutely incredible! You are quite talented! I enjoy everything that you create! ------------------ Denise |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I agree with the promises...Great poem! It was honest and straight to the point! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Flowed so well and so true too!! Great job Echo..love it! ------------------ What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny, compared to what lies within us. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
An exquisitely good piece that likes me much this is. ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thank you all SO much, your kind words and compliments mean so very much to me. I am glad that you like it, thank you for taking the time to read it. ------------------ ~*~ I write to know I am alive ~*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Echo, You have a little gem here. Well done. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Graet poem, Echo. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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