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Sunshine
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0 posted 1999-11-08 10:40 PM


Hello, Mom

I thought I would take a few moments to say hello to you today,
for you were gently on my mind, and I had a few new things to say.
Like, hey, you’re a great-grand again, mother and child are doing fine,
I was at their bedside throughout, like you wished you’d been at mine.

I thought of you while holding him, all nestled to me safe and warm,
I thought that you would wish for him, that he be safe from harm.
Then I had to hand him over, like all good grandmothers do
and I knew within my heart, that the “giving away” was the clue.

So like you, I took a breath, and let it gently out, soft and still,
more and more I know just what you must have thought and felt.
To be a “grand” must be inherent, you care for them just as much;
thought-provoking, isn’t it, what one gets from a baby’s touch.

So Mom, just thought I’d let you know what’s deep within my heart,
all the words we never said, but never really kept us far apart.
For I find myself to be more like you, each and every day,
and Mom, I miss you most, when I kiss my babes and pray.

For that is when you’re at my shoulder, gazing over us all,
and sometimes, I feel your touch, and again I can hear your call.
Memories flood through my mind, I could have never imagined the best
would come to me through pain and fear, that I would pass the tests.

So when my grandbabies hug me, I’ll silently think of you,
and thank you again in my mind, to what you’d led me to.
And Mom, tell my Dad hello for me, he would love these children fine,
and for as long as I can, Mom, I’ll care for these blessings as mine.

©KRJ
8 November 1999


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Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


© Copyright 1999 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 1999-11-08 10:44 PM


Life, and poetry, gets no better than this.

Wonderful, Sunshine.

Isis
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2 posted 1999-11-08 10:48 PM


I'll have to totally agree with Balladeer's comment. I can see you bring Sunshine to your friends and family too!!

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~Isis~
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Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 1999-11-08 10:48 PM


Sunshine,
You touched me on this one. You seemed to have reached a new plateau in your writing. The poem is excellent. *L*

Denise
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4 posted 1999-11-08 11:22 PM


*tears* This is beautiful. I can relate to this so totally. Thanks for putting a voice to your emotions as well as mine.

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Denise


Sunshine
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5 posted 1999-11-09 09:02 AM


'Deer, Isis, Sy, and Denise, thank you for your comments. I've not yet done justice to my emotions, but this is a start.
Pepper
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6 posted 1999-11-09 11:58 AM


Wonderfully touching Sunshine.....
This poem is just beautiful!!

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!


Watcher666
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7 posted 1999-11-09 01:52 PM


This is beautiful.Liked this much

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Sunshine
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8 posted 1999-11-09 02:08 PM


Pepper, Watcher, thanks so much...
PhaerieChild
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9 posted 1999-11-09 02:11 PM


(looking at screen thru teary eyes) this sums up so beautifully the way I feel about my grandchildren. This is an excellent piece.

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If you love me like music, I'll be your song.
~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie


Sunshine
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10 posted 1999-11-09 02:13 PM


Thank you, WildChild - but actually, this was more in memory of my Mom. It can be taken as it suits one, however.
PhaerieChild
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11 posted 1999-11-09 02:19 PM


I am so glad that you were able to be close to your mother. I wasn't but I am close to my children and I would hope that they can relate to me the way you relate to your mother. I would have liked to have really known my mother but life is odd sometimes.

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If you love me like music, I'll be your song.
~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie


Munda
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12 posted 1999-11-09 02:40 PM


Another splendid poem. : )
WhtDove
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13 posted 1999-11-28 01:12 AM


Sunshine this was so very touching!
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