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Open Poetry #3

first attempt at a sonnet

Jennifer Marie O'Neil
Junior Member

since 1999-11-01

Posts 48
port charlotte fl/bklyn ny

0 posted 1999-11-08 03:05 PM

I wait to hear the ringing of the bells
To know our fit together is just fine
Oh to again be under your sweet spells
And you to hear the love I have devine
While we would lay until the rising sun
The sign of day which we could not ignore
For only in darkness we had almost won
And day light leaves me longing for much more
Your eyes are orbs of passion and such fire
And they are where I long some day to be
For they reflect my heart and my desire
A sight I fear that I will never see
But I will wait to hear the bells again
To see once more what I saw in you then

[This message has been edited by Jennifer Marie O'Neil (edited 11-08-1999).]

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

1 posted 1999-11-08 07:47 PM

I liked this much. : )

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 1999-11-08 08:38 PM

This is beautiful, Jennifer! I wish I could write sonnets, just can't seem to get that extra foot going there! I like this very much!

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Denise

Jennifer Marie O'Neil
Junior Member

since 1999-11-01

Posts 48
port charlotte fl/bklyn ny

3 posted 1999-11-09 01:46 AM

this was intended for nans workshop but i do not have the password yet to post there - so criticism on my da- dums and stuff is welcome

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Faith is to believe what we do not see, and the reward of faith is to see what we believe. AUGUSTINE

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

4 posted 1999-11-09 01:36 PM

Enjoyed this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Jennifer Marie O'Neil
Junior Member

since 1999-11-01

Posts 48
port charlotte fl/bklyn ny

5 posted 1999-11-09 03:59 PM

i was affraid it sounded too simple -
but it there was a lot of feeling behind
my words - thanks for reading

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Faith is to believe what we do not see, and the reward of faith is to see what we believe. AUGUSTINE

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