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Dance On The Stars
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Dance On The Stars |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
I was the dancer you were the tune Enchanted melodies that grew to full bloom Slowly and softly the music unfolds Of friendships endeavors lyrics are told In movement and step I glide through the night Till together we hold and dance till first light In one place in time we drift on free will Without limits to hinder the way that we feel This space is all ours to do as we please As we dance on the stars in a warm summer breeze Reaching the notes at the top of the scale From friendship to lovers our lyrics prevail With three little words we spoke as a vow Forever and always we share now No matter how lonely, no matter how far We are the melody that danced on the stars Tori© 1998 |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I really liked this.....kinda sensual, kinda sweet.... |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Beautiful! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Aurora's Fire Junior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 28Oshawa, Ontario, Canada |
Very nice, the words glide as do the dancers. I liked the part when you say "This space is all ours to do as we please" Maybe I am the only one to think this, but you left two spaces between the first two stanza's, maybe this is like the dance floor? *S* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautiful love dance. Well done! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Lovely Tori..... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent, Tori. Good use of beautiful metaphors. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I enjoyed this dance, Tori! Very well done!  ------------------ Denise |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Thanks for all the wonderful reply's, glad you enjoyed the dance... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful write |
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