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Unicorn King |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Beyond a craggy cliff lightning flashes, it silhouettes a noble form, regal and sleek, amidst thunderous crashes, the Unicorn King braves the new born storm. Wind whipping and tossing his silvery mane, his ebony body stands like carven stone, rolling off is sheeting rain, glinting are diamond eyes white as polished bone. Unicorn King screams defiance to the skies. Onyx horn flashes with streaking gold, a sure sign of unicorn ire, memories of when their bodies were bought and sold ignite his passion's fire to protect his herd of mares from danger taking them unawares. From behind streaks stooping death, a griffon rampant falls upon a foal, vice-like talons tear from it final breath and carry it off whole, watching King with patience and mighty spring, impales the murderer's chest, falling he rolls leaving the griffon to the rest. His vengeful, savage herd tears asunder the half lion and half bird, foals fill with wonder bathing in griffon blood while mares trample the carcass into the mud Eyes glowing with an inner knowing from guarding his herd this night, Unicorn King that wondrous being vanishes from sight to reappear on cliff instilling fear in unicorn foes, so the legend goes. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you! You met my challenge most nobly. Though this is excellent, I still think a unicorn would be gentler...but I guess if they are kin to wild stallions, your version is truer to form.  |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Geez, Dream. I've never pictured unicorns in that way before. And here I thought they were gentle creatures! I love the flight of fancy! the stuff dreams (maybe nightmares?) are made of. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, Dream. I enjoyed this tale! ------------------ Denise |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Dream, I've always loved unicorns, and thankyou for opening my eyes that a male would be more like the stallion / unicorn you described. Loved it!!!  ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I wanted the griffen to win j/k this was really awe inspiring It also made me see unicorns in a new light X ------------------ "We have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night" (Tombstone epitaph of two amateur astronomers) |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
This was really good, Dream! I loved the format as well...you couldd "feel" the thunder of the hooves and the strong muscles.... ok.ok.. I AM serious. You can feel it.. 'nuff said.  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
sweet i love mythology and tiz how the legend goes love the different styles you can master dream good show |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Brother of my heart this is awesome!! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Today I can say: "I've seen the Unicorn." Great poem to wake up to ! Thanks. : ) |
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Lilli Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 21Melbourne, Australia |
Well done, its actually how I always pictured a unicorn stallion..think me weird or not all you gentle unicorn fans! Great descriptions, Loved it. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Vivid brilliance my friend! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
'Twas a challenge from Lady deVine as I have no desire to write anything ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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