Warm snow was melting (a very old poem)

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Warm snow was melting (a very old poem)

Master
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since 1999-08-18

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0 posted 1999-11-05 01:14 PM

That night there was a full eclipse
Warm snow was melting on her lips
A scent of spring was in the air
He said, “let’s go,” she asked him, “where?”
They slowly wandered with no purpose
Warm snow was melting on the surface
He tightly held her shaking hand
He said, “let’s kiss,” she asked him, “when?”
Their lips have touched and frozen still
Warm snow was melting on a hill
Heart to a heart, eye to an eye
He begged, “again!” she asked him, “why?”
There was no purpose in it all
Warm snow has melted in his soul
In her, the snow turned into ice
And she was melting in his eyes

Watcher666
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1 posted 1999-11-05 08:51 PM

Beautiful!

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WhtDove
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2 posted 1999-11-05 08:59 PM

Whoa, liked this one much! Love the end there!

Master
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3 posted 1999-11-05 11:28 PM

Thank you both!

caroline
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4 posted 1999-11-06 09:41 AM

Nice imagery here Master...it paints your words well

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Martie

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5 posted 1999-11-06 12:22 PM

I read this several times. REally liked the mood you created. Well done!

Master
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Boston, MA

6 posted 1999-11-06 03:38 PM

Thanks Caroline and Martie! Glad you liked it!

Munda
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7 posted 1999-11-06 03:42 PM

Master, this is beautiful ! : )

Denise

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8 posted 1999-11-06 05:01 PM

Very nice, Master, enjoyed this very much!

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Marge Tindal

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9 posted 1999-11-06 05:14 PM

I think I was there on that
snow-capped hill.
Breathlessly awaiting the melt ...

Beautiful, just beautiful.

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