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A Villanelle ( For The Challenge )
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A Villanelle ( For The Challenge ) |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
A Villanelle , five lines of three Confounded french , but let me see Until at last , makes sense to me I am entrenched ,'tis fight or flee The die is cast , what is will be A Villanelle , five lines of three I will stand fast , if luck's with me All will go well , I say to thee Until at last , makes sense to me Yea time will tell , of victory Though hours have passed , I shall decree A Villanelle , five lines of three . I am steadfast , with staunch esprit I will repel , mine enemies Until at last , makes sense to me Of four I'll tell , and thus you'll see As was forecast , what is will be Avillanelle , five lines of three Until at last , makes sense to me ! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
WOW..I am in awe. |
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suicidal dreams Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343Toledo Ohio USA |
Whoa vey good i wish i could do Villanelle as well as thee. ------------------ life is short kill quick |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I have no idea what "five lines of three" means, but the poem and construction is excellent. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Marilyn, S. Dreams, Thanks for the comments! Balladeer, The five lines of three refers to the five tersets which form the major body of the Villanelle , To speak of four , refers to the quatrain which completes it . I set out to do this in such a way as to remind myself of the correct format. It seems to me that this was perhaps a battle cry in past usage , which did indeed help me complete this challenge . |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Clever way to do this! Challenge met with aplomb!  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very good DrMoose! Maybe if I study this, I'll be able to do one!  ------------------ Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dr.Moose1, Well done you met the challenge. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Interesting! I have to say it was well done. Don't know if I could do it! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Poet D.,dSnyder , Seymour ,whtDove. Thanks to all! |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Great!! This could actually help me figure this format out!!! Um...gonna have to print it out..hehehe. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
very clever |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
sagacious piece Dr. Moose...... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Excellent, Dr. Moose. I wish I could do that! |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Great Villanelle, better than mine for sure I especially liked how every line rhymed, i don't think I could do that. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Quite impressive, Bullwinkle. You have done well, indeed. ------------------ Michael Anderson I could not love except where Death Was mingling his with Beauty's breath - Or Hymen, Time, and Destiny Were stalking between her and me. EAP |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Sally S., Hoot,Pepper , johnt300, S. Decay, Michael , Thanks so much , I really didn't expect this much feedback on a first attempt . It is a difficult format , but interesting . |
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