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A Fool's Aspiration (A Sonnet)
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A Fool's Aspiration (A Sonnet) |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash 
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A fool to try to clothe true love with words! When even dreams cannot, true love, contain, But failure here makes not my song a dirge When love exceeds the words of this refrain. My passion surges forth to push my pen. My clumsy hands try vainly to comply, But how can I bewail my failure when Without my love my inkwell would be dry. So don't lament for me, beloved friend, For Love's sweet kiss has blessed my wanting brow, But weep for him who meets his mortal end Before, on him, Her gift She does endow. A foolish man, a fool for all to see! Perhaps a fool, then, I aspire to be. ------------------ Jim "Don't confuse me with the facts, I've already made up my mind." |
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Jewl_24_1999 Member
since 1999-10-24
Posts 64USA |
I see you found the ability to finish the poem that you started. It certainly turned out well. I can't waite for more of your work. [This message has been edited by Jewl_24_1999 (edited 11-06-1999).] |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
somewhat partial to sonnets myself... well done.. enjoyed. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Yeah, I like sonnets too, and this one is really good.  ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very very good! Such a tough form. How do you all do them and do them so well? ------------------ Denise |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Thanks, Jewl. My notebook is full of rough ideas and, as long as my inspiration continues, I'll keep writing. Thanks Mike. And thanks Ms. Decay ... considering what you subjected my last sonnet to, I am truly honored. And Denise, I know you don't want to hear this, but "practice and patience". Thanks again everyone. ------------------ Jim "Don't confuse me with the facts, I've already made up my mind." |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Liked this much....Well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Thanks Watcher. If anyone else is interested in learning more about sonnets, check out Nan's workshop on sonnet writing. I highly recommend it.. ------------------ Jim "Don't confuse me with the facts, I've already made up my mind." |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Very lovely...enjoyed it ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! love this! |
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