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Upon My Face
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Upon My Face |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648
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You saw the sorry state of man -The punishment he faced In pity You devised a plan -Sin's debt Your blood erased. Upon my face I seek You, Lord -Your servant in disgrace Your word 'tis true a mighty sword -Heart pierced I seek Your grace. So quick to judge, forgiveness slow -This heart please cleanse, I pray Your gentle love help me to show -To all along my way. Too much my mind dwells on myself -For fading things I lust Too long Your Book sits on my shelf -Collecting webs of dust. Refreshing Spring please satiate -This parched and barren land Restore again that blissful state -Bestowed by Your own hand. O, Sovereign God, Exalted King -Before Your throne I bow Forevermore my soul shall sing -The mercies You endow. ------------------ Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Denise, not only is this absolutely beautiful, but it is extreamly well written. Nice job  Ruth ------------------ Alis volat propriis |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Denise, while I can't share your beliefs, I can say that this poem is very stunning, and moving to even a non-believer. ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Hoot and Sys for your kind comments! I'm glad you liked it! ------------------ Denise |
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H. Arlequin Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210 |
smoooooooooooches Denise!! a great one!! HA |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wonderful job, Denise! I was afraid when I saw the title that it was going to be a zit poem, ala Poet DeVine. Nice to see it wasn't. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks guys for reading and commenting! H.A. - smooches right back to ya! Balladeer-I must have missed that one! I'll have to look it up! Thanks again guys! ------------------ Denise |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Very well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Patrick B Member
since 1999-10-28
Posts 58uk |
lovely! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Beautiful Denise...... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
This is simply professional! Like Balladeer, I thought it was gonna be something that should have been posted in the Adult Forum or something...and, I truly wasn't disappointed! Very very well written and the message was fantastic..... |
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misterpoet Junior Member
since 1999-10-26
Posts 18 |
thank you for writing this. sometimes i feel like this but know that the almighty God will take care of us. splendid |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Isn't it amazing when we find our way again? Lovely, lovely piece. Thank you for sharing it. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautifully written Denise. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Absolutely lovely... very well done! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! I'm so glad you all liked this so much! I am truly grateful for everyone who reads what I write! It means alot! Sunshine- I seem to lose and find my way a skizillion times a day - so glad He never loses me! ------------------ Denise |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
THIS POEM IS SO BEAUTIFUL, I AM ALSO GUILTY OF FALLING IN AND OUT OF FAITH AT TIMES. YET WHEN SOMETHING GOES WRONG HE IS STILL THERE TO LISTEN. WONDERFULLY WRITTEN!!!! I BELIEVE WE ALL SHOULD FIND THE TIME, TO PRAISE OUR MIGHTY GOD DIVINE. SO MANY TAKE FOR GRANTED HIS LOVE, THAT SHINES SO PURE FROM UP ABOVE. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Deinse I'm so amazed! This was just EXCELLENT! Perfectly written, what an inspiration! I'm in awe here! Inspired were you? Just excellent! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks Devina and WhtDove for your wonderful comments! I'm so glad that you liked it! And thanks for the poem Devina. And WhtDove- His love is the best inspiration, yep!! ------------------ Denise |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW!! Denise, this is excellent!!! beautifully written. ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks Dark Angel. I'm so glad you liked it! ------------------ Denise |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Profoundly Esquisite! Very moving piece. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Had to read this again it was sooooo good! |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Incredibly beautiful D One of the best pieces of poetry I've ever read...brava, my dear!(May I have your permission to send this to someone close to me? She would enjoy it so much!) ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Julie, WhtDove and Caroline, thanks so much! I'm am grateful for your lovely comments! ------------------ Denise |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Denise: Beautifully written ... both eloquent and accurate. A wonderful work. ------------------ Jim "If I rest, I rust." -Martin Luther |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks, Jim, I'm glad you enjoyed it! ------------------ Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Cruising through the poems. This one caught my eye. Realized my Book was a little dusty too. It's not now. Thank you for the inspiration. Lovely indeed. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Absolutely beautiful! Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks, Marge and Nocht! So glad that you enjoyed it! ------------------ Denise |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Beautiful Denise. Loved it ! : ) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Munda, I'm so glad that you did! ------------------ Denise |
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