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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Remember Me… I see you in your paradise of wind crashing waves and sunlight move together to form flowing crystal rain splashing onto shore I conjure up your image, see you living your dreams and knowing you never think of me now… though you have lived my life for me An error of my heart which I must account for to the many that I hurt in your name I live with the crippled trust you left to me, a scar transferred to all I touched afterward But you…bathed in the ocean breezes, castled in the sands of islands… You live without memory of my love Blind to my face behind closed eyes Any reminder of me washed away in the tides of your Eden I send these words on a voyage into the gulf…a message in a bottle to float into your pirate mind and recall me from the guilty passages of your history A fleeting sight of the ship of illusion that you captained so skillfully… and abandoned so easily to sink to the depths of a watery hell I sail on…grace and honor reviving my masts Fresh currents like smooth glass lead me to new seas of glory and there are no thieves to steal the gold from my eyes Remember me… caroline 1999 all rights reserved ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
This is excellent...I like the strength portrayed at the end of the poem. Well done. |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Can't expect anything less than GREAT from you Caroline. Excellent job on imagery and parallel. How do you do it??? ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Thou who has given so much to me, give one thing more: a grateful heart. >George Herbert |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
another first rate piece Caroline.....I DO enjoy your work......... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh my, another wonderful poem full of longing and love, two subjects very near and dear to my heart right now  well written, very intense imagery------------------ Man can not discover new oceans unless he has the courage to lose sight of the shore. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Caroline, You write so well with such a rich palette. Enjoyed the read. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Breathtakingly beautiful, Caroline! This is exquisite! ------------------ Denise |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
*blushing* thanks...I'm glad you enjoyed this one. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
My Lord, Caroline - this is superb! 'Castled in the sands of islands...' - simply beautiful. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
enjoyed this wonderful piece |
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