Heart's Folly (practice for sonnet workshop)

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Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15

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Sitting in Michael's Lap

0 posted 1999-10-31 01:11 PM

A vow of truth and loyalty, denied
When he who swore, in lust or weakness, strayed --
She holds the ashes of a promise made,
And Logic's judgment rings: "He lied -- he lied!"

Though Reason's eyes may see the folly of
This hopeless venture, fearing only pain,
And from pursuit, would urge her to refrain --
The wounded Heart protests: "I love -- I love!"

Though foolish and misplaced may be the trust
She has in him, she cannot still refuse;
With naught to gain, and all her soul to lose,
The Heart, unmoved, insists: "I must -- I must!"

Thus, Logic learns the fruitless game he plays:
For stubborn Hearts shall have their stubborn ways.

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

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1 posted 1999-10-31 01:20 PM

This is beautifully done, Skyfyre! You are quite talented with the different forms. I enjoyed this very much!

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Denise

Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

2 posted 1999-10-31 02:05 PM

Thank you, Denise, I humbly accept your wonderful compliment. Truth be told, it has been some time since I attempted a sonnet, and I had to do some background reading in order to refresh my memory about rhyme scheme, meter and such.

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

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Purgatorial Incarceration

3 posted 1999-10-31 02:13 PM

The sonnet is indeed well wrought.
And you were right, this did pertain. And leads one always to wonder the why. Certainly a sad tale for both parties, another situation where both sides lose.

Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15

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That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

4 posted 1999-10-31 02:26 PM

Wonderful sonnet, I love sonnets when done well, and despise them when done shoddily. This was indeed a success!

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.

Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

5 posted 1999-10-31 05:40 PM

Why, indeed, Christopher. I believe that could qualify as "one of those questions (that will likely never be answered)."

Sys D: Thanks, I guess I wasn't as rusty as I thought!

--Kess

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 1999-10-31 09:29 PM

Kess...this is well done. Might I ask why you boke up this piece though. One of the things sonnets are known for are their compactness.

Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

7 posted 1999-10-31 09:38 PM

You are indeed correct, Ruth -- perhaps this is evidence that I think in stanzas? Who knows?

--Kess

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

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8 posted 1999-11-01 07:18 AM

geesh - I can see I'm in trouble already.....

Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

9 posted 1999-11-01 10:12 AM

Why Nan -- (vapid grin) -- whatever do you mean? Moi? Trouble? Nejemais!

--Kess

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

10 posted 1999-11-02 05:25 AM

Liked this much!! Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

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