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Iloveit
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0 posted 1999-10-28 12:40 PM


Imprisoned am I by you, my love
your touch a breath to my flame
desire rages beyond measure

no other will do.

Passions rise in the morn
and under cover of the night
and once quelled, yet again and again.

If I bang my cup on the bars
it is only for more of you
fill me, your passion mine, mine yours.

My sentence shall not be paroled early
argue against it, yes I would,
I want the full life term.

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©1999 Iloveit


© Copyright 1999 Iloveit - All Rights Reserved
RSEvans
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1 posted 1999-10-28 12:52 PM


A prisoner of love? Great imagery.

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RainbowGirl
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2 posted 1999-10-28 01:27 PM


ILoveit: I love "If I bang my cup on the bars"...

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


suthern
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3 posted 1999-10-28 01:39 PM


Will ya quit banging that *&^*&! cup on the bars???? How am I supposed to get any sleep? *G*

I like this one very much, Lovey... especially the last verse (and the mental picture of you banging that cup on the bars! *G*)

Iloveit
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4 posted 1999-10-28 01:55 PM


RS...thanks

and Rainbow girl thanks sometimes I am inspired.... lol by what though I don't know

suthern if I'd a known that my cup banging was keeping you awake I'd of started a lot sooner....lolol but just think even if I stop ...you will still have that mental picture to keep you company lolol teach you to wave that bat around us prisoners *g*

Balladeer
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5 posted 1999-10-28 03:58 PM


It would be great to be your guardin' angel! Prisoners of love....ain't we all? Nice, K.
Iloveit
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6 posted 1999-10-28 04:38 PM


yep we sure are, and yep if I was gonna have an angel guardin' me, you would be perfect
we could talk about rhyme and meter through the bars, both of which I am lacking in *g*

Watcher666
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7 posted 1999-10-28 09:14 PM


Enjoyed this much!!

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hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 1999-10-28 09:50 PM


I Love It....wonderfully written Iloveit, you did well by this one. Now take your bow
Denise
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9 posted 1999-10-28 10:04 PM


Very very lovely!

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Denise


Pepper
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10 posted 1999-10-28 11:30 PM


Very clever Iloveit.....liked this much I did....

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire!

devina
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Cali
11 posted 1999-10-28 11:54 PM


GREAT! AS IF THE BARS ARE BINDING YOU BY LOVE. YOUR MENTAL IMAGING IS WONDERFUL!
Isis
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12 posted 1999-10-29 02:27 AM


Love the imagery, great job

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How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool?
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(Daughter of Mystery)



Michael
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13 posted 1999-10-29 02:32 AM


Oh how this one rings true in my life. I will not be freed soon enough from this prison that keeps life hungering, (Although, I see a means to release soon, in mine). Wonderful poem. I was wondering what all that racket was, here, let me bang my cup too.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



JTF
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since 1999-08-09
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France
14 posted 1999-10-29 07:17 AM


What's this all about Lovey being tied up to the bars of her bed and making so much noise Auntie can't sleep ?? ... Hmmm, that must be my funny English ... LOL

Seriously, great one Lovey ...


WhtDove
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15 posted 1999-10-29 08:18 AM


I like how you did this! Was unique! Banging on the bars...I want the full life term. Well stated!
Iloveit
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16 posted 1999-11-01 05:39 PM


ok, don't know what my server is up to, but finally got the hang of getting a posting box, and wanted to tell everyone thanks, really glad you all liked it
passing shadows
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17 posted 2004-04-25 10:44 PM


big smile
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