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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
Imprisoned am I by you, my love your touch a breath to my flame desire rages beyond measure no other will do. Passions rise in the morn and under cover of the night and once quelled, yet again and again. If I bang my cup on the bars it is only for more of you fill me, your passion mine, mine yours. My sentence shall not be paroled early argue against it, yes I would, I want the full life term. ------------------ ©1999 Iloveit |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
A prisoner of love? Great imagery. ------------------ No matter where you go, somebody's probably already been there and gotten the parking space... |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
ILoveit: I love "If I bang my cup on the bars"...  HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Will ya quit banging that *&^*&! cup on the bars???? How am I supposed to get any sleep? *G* I like this one very much, Lovey... especially the last verse (and the mental picture of you banging that cup on the bars! *G*) |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
RS...thanks and Rainbow girl thanks suthern if I'd a known that my cup banging was keeping you awake I'd of started a lot sooner....lolol but just think even if I stop ...you will still have that mental picture to keep you company lolol teach you to wave that bat around us prisoners *g* |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It would be great to be your guardin' angel! Prisoners of love....ain't we all? Nice, K. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
yep we sure are, and yep if I was gonna have an angel guardin' me, you would be perfect we could talk about rhyme and meter through the bars, both of which I am lacking in *g* |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Enjoyed this much!! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I Love It....wonderfully written Iloveit, you did well by this one. Now take your bow |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very very lovely! ------------------ Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very clever Iloveit.....liked this much I did.... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
GREAT! AS IF THE BARS ARE BINDING YOU BY LOVE. YOUR MENTAL IMAGING IS WONDERFUL! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Love the imagery, great job ------------------ How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool? ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh how this one rings true in my life. I will not be freed soon enough from this prison that keeps life hungering, (Although, I see a means to release soon, in mine). Wonderful poem. I was wondering what all that racket was, here, let me bang my cup too. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
What's this all about Lovey being tied up to the bars of her bed and making so much noise Auntie can't sleep ?? ... Hmmm, that must be my funny English ... LOL Seriously, great one Lovey ... |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I like how you did this! Was unique! Banging on the bars...I want the full life term. Well stated! |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
ok, don't know what my server is up to, but finally got the hang of getting a posting box, and wanted to tell everyone thanks, really glad you all liked it |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
big smile |
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