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Wendy
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since 1999-09-10
Posts 16
Vermont

0 posted 1999-10-01 08:42 PM


Clasping my hands together,
Fingers mortared in the brotherhood
Of canned sardines,
Palms cupped skyward,
They are sturdy like a rudder,
Helpful as hemp.

As I rung each footstep
And watch the others disembark,
I suction myself to the security
Of this hull;
Barnacle solid
And zebra mussel tenacious,
Rising always steady with the watermark,
Seaweed hanging in chains,
Flotsam bobbing
Like the leering jack in the box.

How fetally safe one must feel
To float fluid in the lungs.
Even the careless suicides
Get to map their deadly anniversaries.

© Copyright 1999 Wendy - All Rights Reserved
Justin Thyme
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since 1999-09-13
Posts 216
Oz
1 posted 1999-10-01 09:06 PM


Interesting imagery.... I read this several times and need to read it again... you have quite an ability to paint a picture using words and that's one helluva talent, Ms. Wendy.

Hey, care to give some insight into this poem? I'd appreciate hearing your take on it... for instance, what's it mean?

hehehe....

Justin T.

Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
2 posted 1999-10-01 09:10 PM


Wonderful imagery Wendy, a quite poignant message I may add

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Michael Anderson

I could not love except where Death
Was mingling his with Beauty's breath -
Or Hymen, Time, and Destiny
Were stalking between her and me.
EAP




caroline
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since 1999-08-16
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3 posted 1999-10-01 09:23 PM


Wendy you certainly have a flair and style that is superb I like this a lot, and the message it imparts is, as stated above, quite poignant.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
4 posted 1999-10-01 09:39 PM


OK Wendy - I do really love this one - The whole poem speaks clearly about who you are - That's obvious to me, knowing you as I do - I just don't get the "careless suicides" part...
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 1999-10-01 11:06 PM


I like this one, the imagery is grand

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It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.

Christopher
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since 1999-08-02
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Purgatorial Incarceration
6 posted 1999-10-02 02:10 PM


Feeling sheepish (back of Balladeer!) as well, because I don't understand the "point" of the last two lines either!
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