Open Poetry #3 |
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PoeticPreacher Junior Member
since 1999-10-20
Posts 28jkljkj |
After the stars come out at night Before the dawn begins Uncalled evil, a familiar face, quietly slips in. Silenced are my pains, covering his addiction. Even though my night reveals, Day cannot see my affliction. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Well done Acrostic parsons.....very well done! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well done, indeed!! |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Good work here! Well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Intense in its brevity, the acrostic form heightens it even more. Great job, here. The effect is perfect. ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Very nice Acrostic. And I don't even know how to get a smiley face on the message! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done! ------------------ Denise |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
The last line is very poignant... The abused always seem to have a way of protecting the abuser. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very Intense acrostic |
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PoeticPreacher Junior Member
since 1999-10-20
Posts 28jkljkj |
Thanks for letting me know how you feel this poem. |
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