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Panning for gold
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Panning for gold |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Panning for gold A man paints his face with sorrow, From a kit of borrow. A tear, a frown, a sad embrace, Macabre he paints his face. He molds it, but his eyes twinkle, Like a Rip Van Winkle. Draws the lines in black of borrow, The face, wretched sorrow. The mirrors image sets the mood. A sad and somber brood. He nods consent of glooms display And stores the kit away. He hides behind a closed curtain,. Fearful and uncertain. Stumbles forward in raucous view, His awkward fall a rue. The audience roars in laughter. Howls fly to the rafters. His eyes rain out sympathy clouds, For mercy from the crowd. Then antics follow in pursuit, He honks and blows his snoot. And then to every ones surprise Squirts water out his eyes. He turns away his gloomy head, Lays down, curls up like dead Waving hilarity away. Their ludicrous display. He is an alchemist of old, Turning sad into gold. Making from his own disaster, Gold, of human laughter. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Seymour: Brilliant..  HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Very nice ------------------ No matter where you go, somebody's probably already been there and gotten the parking space... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Double thumbs up, Seymour... and then... sustained applause. Your poems are always a delightful read... but if I had to choose a favorite, this would be it!!! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It's all really good, Sy - I like the last stanza best of all, though..... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RG, Brilliant, hardly, but I love the sound of it. *L* RSEvans, Nice is nice, thank you. Suthern, To this I can only say, I love you too. Nan, I knew you would pick up on the gold. *L* |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Excellent! Lovely read! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful! ------------------ Denise |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Again, I really like the imagery here Seymour . One observation if I may . You sometimes seem almost too concise in getting your point across . With your obvious talent for words , perhaps you're cutting us short ? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Watcher, You can't beat excellent, thank you so much. Denise, Another treasure of praise, you are a dear. Dr.Moose 1, Very clever observation, it is one of my faults always afraid of being miss read. I will work on it, thank you. |
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