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Flattery: An Ode to Daddy
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Flattery: An Ode to Daddy |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Daughter look up from three feet tall And hear the rage in daddy's call What's in your head? you keep playing! Don't you hear what daddy's saying? Daughter oh heed your daddy's call He's twice over your three feet tall You play with brothers shoot-shoot toys Killing bad guys they're all just boys Daughter please hear your daddys call And note the wafting alcohol Please do put down the shoot-shoot guns And bid his call be on the run Daughter playing in darkened hall Pretends not hearing daddy's call She hums a tune but sings it wrong One of her daddy's drinking songs |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Walt, nice to see you back! I felt a sadness reading this...Daddy doesn't know what effect he's having on this little girl..it's sad...... I liked it.  |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nice to see ya again Walt.. yep... raising kids.. yep... |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Rough...very very rough, and, unfortunately, all too common in today's families. Very vivid and aptly portrayed WoW, with good use of childhood metaphors and names. Alicat |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well you certainly haven't lost your touch, Walt. You certainly have been missed... This is a heartwrencher but only too true. Thank you. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Glad I am to see you back walt.  Well told, of course, and indeed heartwrenching. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ikes, ditto's of the above...sad commentary! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx guys for the vote of confidence was uninspired but o so wanted to join you guys again thanky yuh for all muh closest friends support yuh im tryin and is all one can do |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Glad to see you back my friend! So sad a verse,and so true! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful to read! ------------------ Denise |
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