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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom 
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I stood on the shore icy frothy waves splashing over my toes face upwards - naked the wind sending my hair into a dance all its own the sun setting lent magic to the end blending colours of day and night the dreams of yet another day came trampling through my mind as one with the rhythm of the waves the wind carried my voice rising up and down like seagulls into the icy frothy waves that rolled over my bare toes on the shore alone upon the ocean's floor.... ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 10-25-1999).] |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
oh gosh RG I love it when you share a picture of your world, your solitary figure by the sea it is sad but simply beautiful hugs |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Loved the imagery.Well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I like the imagery in this piece.......and being the ocean makes it better  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Now lemme make sure I've got this right... you're standing naked by the sea... in desperate need of a Toerag to comfort your icy toes... among other things... and then you dance and shriek in delight??? *G* Or did the seagull drop a bombshell on your dancing hair? Is that it? LOL. Hunh???? Seriously, Rainbow... this is lovely... Well done!!! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Suthern: You devil...ROFLMAO...oooops...yep, I was enjoying casting my heart to the winds but you came along and cast my laughter instead so my heart still resides here in PIP...ROFL You IMP!!! HUSG All.. Thanks for your comments and forgive my laughter with that little minx...she never could let me rest with sadness but that's only one reason why I love her...I love my friends.. They just won't let me be SAD...LOL...Bless!HUSG all ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 10-25-1999).] |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
A beautiful picture you paint here Rainbow.Stunning piece. ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
Naked with feet in the ocean, in England!!! In October!! You'll ffffffreeze! Well written though. ------------------ Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'd rather you guffaw than grieve. I'd rather your dear heart you leave Here with people that love you, Understand when you feel blue. I'd rather you learn to believe That, no matter how wobbly, a smile Can lighten your load for a while. So, my friend, don't you frown I'll be playing the clown Cheering you on every mile. So as you stand there by the sea Know I wish you were dancing with glee, That your laughter be heard Disturbing those birds And that from all sorrow you're free. (Imp... that's a compliment, right? *G*) |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, that explains the legend of Loch Ness!! Kidding, Rainbow!!!! The thought of you standing there at the water's edge wearing a smile and nothing else, screaming that the water was too cold, is more than a faint heart can experience. Take pictures. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Too cute! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, RG. Thank you for sharing this. ------------------ Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RG, Was that you standing naked on the beach? Beautiful poem, enjoyed the read. |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
you, naked in the Northern Sea ?? ... Heavens, you must have turned Blue Mouse !! ... It gives a vivid picture ... lovely poem. HUSG ------------------ Plaisir d'amour ne dure qu'un moment, Chagrin d'amour dure toute la vie. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Rainbow, the imagery was great, loved it ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Guys: It was supposed to read that my face was naked, not me!! I know I'm slightly crazy but that would be nuts...ROFL Thanks all for the comments.. HUGS Suthern: Oh bless.. and yep, IMP is a compliment..HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
I can smell the air within those words, beautifull. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Now Rainbow....if you're standing by the sea wearin' nuthin but a smile ya might "catch" more than a cold yanno?....Them "Toerag" fish bite just great on bait such as yourself!!! You'd at least get a 'nibble' from me... |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
lol@imp being a compliment and suthern your poem was beautiful ....glad you all made her smile, and at least one of us knew you weren't crazy enough to be naked in the sea at this time of the year *very knowing smile*big hugs lady |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
I liked the imagery so well, I took a brief stroll through the water and loved it. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Very vivid...nice. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Beautiful words and great imagery...(as stated before me) I wish I could write free form...nope, not me!!!! Rhyme is my thing. LOL |
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brandondinsmore Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 142OKC, OK |
What in the HELL do all of these initials stand for. I'm a new member and all, and I already feel lost! HELP ME! brandondinsmore@hotmail.com |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you paint a pretty picture |
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