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Open Poetry #3

Building Blocks

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 1999-10-25 04:58 PM

Cement is not the white
ground powder of earth,
the rolling pin of walls and slabs,
the pouring of
the weary worker’s
aching caress.
It is mixed dough
strong and sure
and smelling of warm
aproned arms of morning,
the rich fragrance
of building
the first fire
in the hearth
and the loving hand
that powers
the cradles uninterrupted
rocking.

sparrow
Junior Member

since 1999-10-22

Posts 33

1 posted 1999-10-25 05:01 PM

I'll never think of Cement in the same light again!

Thanks for the new perspective

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Sparrow Hawk
Jester of http://www.scribedesigns.com/archflambeoth/

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

2 posted 1999-10-25 05:03 PM

WOW sums it up quite nicely. This is very good, Martie. Brief, to the point, excellent metaphor, lots of meaning and a strong message. This piece has it all. good work.

Watcher666
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

3 posted 1999-10-25 05:19 PM

Well done! Liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 1999-10-25 05:35 PM

This flows very nicely, I like it

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

5 posted 1999-10-28 03:22 AM

Excellent! I agree with Balladeer - it has it all indeed.

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