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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 1999-10-24 04:12 PM


Our Noahs arc

Stars recite like floating lights
Lighting the chasm of the night.
And lodestar the infinite way
Extending the finite of day.

We commute on a ship of thoughts
Weather happy or over wrought.
Traveling at the speed of relief.
To attain a seat of belief.

We seek the fantasy of love
In the infinite up above.
Launching our own Noahs arc
To find a park to disembark.

The island is a mystic place
A mantic of extended space.
Different to each this primal beach.
And therefore difficult to reach.

It is a vivid, built of ID and
A little bit back of the eyelid.

© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Watcher666
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1 posted 1999-10-24 04:52 PM


Excellent!! Loved this!!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Martie
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2 posted 1999-10-24 04:52 PM


A ship of thougths, what a wonderful concept. I liked this very much.
Julie
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3 posted 1999-10-24 05:06 PM


Reminds me of all of here at Passions. Really liked this very very much!

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Julie
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Almost all our misfortunes in life come from the wrong notions we have about the things that happen to us.
>Stendhal



Skyfyre
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4 posted 1999-10-24 05:13 PM


The last couplet was quite clever -- made me smile, it did. Thanks for sharing!

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.

hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 1999-10-24 07:30 PM


We commute on a ship of thoughts

very nice line

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 1999-10-24 09:01 PM


Watcher,Martie, Julie, sky and hoot,
I thank you one and all You made my day.

Denise
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7 posted 1999-10-24 09:24 PM


Wonderful, Seymour! 'We commute on a ship of thoughts', great line and the next as well, very clever play on words. I also loved 'Traveling at the speed of relief'. Well...I just loved the whole piece!

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Denise

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 1999-10-24 11:43 PM


Denise,
Thank you for reading and understanding the poem.

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