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On Broken Wings (a Pantoum)
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On Broken Wings (a Pantoum) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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(I've borrowed some thoughts from some of my other poems for this one so it may sound a bit fimilar. I just thought it would make a good Pantoum) On Broken Wings She flies on broken wings In clear pearlescent skies With voice once mute she sings Softly as she flies In clear pearlescent skies He feathers catch the sun Softly as she flies Released, her battles won Her feathers catch the sun Once caged, she’s been set free Released, her battles won His love it was the key Once caged she’s been set free Wings clipped, now given flight His love it was the key She’s drawn into his light Wings clipped, now given flight Their love can not be wrong She’s drawn into his light Her heart is filled with song Their love can not be wrong With voice once mute she sings Her heart is filled with song She flies on broken wings To Tyson, Thanks for giving me my voice again, being my song, and showing me how to fly. I love you darling. Ruth ------------------ This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides |
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Starith Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 176Leesburg, FL USA |
Now a tribute like this just can't go without at least on reponse to it. This was truly beautiful Hoot. As always you have written a wonderful poem.  Star ------------------ We are only truly apperciated after we are no more! |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Lovely Hoot! Liked this very much!! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Even though it's familiar, Hoot, it's still beautiful. And you're right, it does make a good pantoum. "She's drawn into his light, Her heart is given song" is a great way to describe what he's done to you. Best of luck to you both. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." "Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near..." |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Lovely Hoot! How many days left now? So happy for you both!! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I enjoyed reading this--well done! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Truly a lovely flight! ------------------ Denise |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
This was beautiful. You expressed so well how someone's love can heal the hurts. I know that well! Good Luck my friend. I.Skye ------------------ "With love's light wings did I o'er-perch these walls; for stony limits cannot hold love out; and what love can do that dares love attempt." Romeo & Juliet Act II |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ruth, this is truly beautiful best of luck to both of you ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Sighs and smiles! This was lovely, Ruth; I have to say that my favorite line was: "Her feathers catch the sun" I could see you soaring! Well done! --Kess ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady Hoot: The cake is only as good as the ingredients and the cook… a finer pastry could not be made. Thanks for the treat. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Everyone, thank you for your kind response to this one Pepper....10 days now Sir Andrew...thank you for the kind words, greatly appreciated |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Hoot this is stunningly beautiful You've made me know how it feels to fly!------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
Wow, that was gorgeous! I find that particular style very interesting too. Well done! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ruth your talent is expanding! EXQUISITE piece you've put together here! Enjoyed it! |
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starchild Member
since 1999-10-22
Posts 59manchester, england |
the frst and las verses were the best verse i have read on this site. SHE FLIES WITH BROKEN WINGS if i had wrote that i would have brought me flowers |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
As always...beautiful ! |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
She flies on broken wings...another really good one Hoot. Jenny |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you everyone |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Hi Ruth, Forgive me for getting to this so late. It couldn't be helped as you know. This is a beautiful poem. Thank you very much for it. How many days now? Until then... Tyson |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Clapping very loudly here Hoot! Bravo! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Isn't it just astounding what a bit of inspiration can do for us? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nan, yes it is, thank you Christopher, thanks a lot Tyson, I know dear, thank you and 8 days |
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Scarlet pimpernel New Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 9Birkenhead,Wirral,England |
I see good skills here, I see were you are coming from. However, I can't help but connect it with the song line, " Black bird singing in the dead of night. Take these broken wings and learn to fly." Nether the less I still find it good reading and it leaves be thinking abot it... I like that. |
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