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Purloined Innocence
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Purloined Innocence |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
In the depths of onyx eyes A stagnant swamp forever lies It beheld the minutes turned to years Watched the smiles mask the tears And added lilting laughter to it all In a heart ridden with murk Sickening motives and methods do lurk Memories of a spiraling decadence With a prize of purloined innocence She was held close, a bittersweet gall But what does the mirror now reflect? A being devoid of pride and respect All hope as vapid as clouds in the sky A worthlessness she just can't deny Hiding and exhibiting impurity And in the shadows of a broken mind Perhaps she thought that she would find A life long slave, among other things By holding me and clipping my wings But I am now laughing, soaring and free ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- [This message has been edited by Systematic Decay (edited 10-24-1999).] |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Well done. Liked this very much.!! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Glad to see you here tonight with such wondrous verse, my friend. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Well done...loved the last three lines..  HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Well done systematic....I could see a few places where a nip and tuck would serve well to perfect the meter, but over all an terrific piece. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Another Well Done Sys!....... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You seem to have a depth of wisdom and a talent for writing that belies your youth! I am impressed with your writings and I believe this is one of my favorites! ------------------ Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You did well in evoking the dark and moody and then the last lines freed the feeling. Well done. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Thank you, everybody for all the replies. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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