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@#$% You All
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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@#$% you for hurting me and scarring me for life. For making my life so miserable that I turned to the knife. @#$% you for betraying me and taking all my trust. For what I thought was love you told me was just lust. @#$% you for raping me and threatening me not to tell. For you took something innocent and brought it all to hell. @#$% you for beating me and saying I brought it on. For the marks you left behind are so far from being gone. @#$% you all for everything even the ones I didn't say. For what you all have done slowly kills me everyday! ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Your anger and pain shows through well one this one. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I applaude you Echo, for releasing like this! This is awesome and powerful to say the least! What a way to let it out, huh? I bet it felt good to write something like this....You go girl! (clapping!) BRAVO !!!! ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Watcher...I was totally going to write about something different but this is what came out when I started to write. I guess I needed to get it out  PFF...Yeah after I wrote it, I felt better. I wasnt going to post it, but I decided to do it anyways. Thanks for reading!! ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Bravo Echo! Writing out the anger is a big step in healing...You're flyin' girl. ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Almost all our misfortunes in life come from the wrong notions we have about the things that happen to us. >Stendhal |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Bravo to you for having the guts to show this. This is therapy and I have used it many times myself. You have the right attitude. They are the ones the need to be left behind. You show them be being better then they could ever be. You have friends here that will help you. I can see that in the support they give in their posts. Believe me it does get better. Thanks for sharing. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well, I'm glad you decided to post it! The feelings come out quite well here. Good for you, it has a way of doing that don't it? Something you set out to do and something else comes along. GREAT JOB SWEETIE!! Bravo to you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Julie...Flying high!! Marilyn...Thanks for reading and responding. I am thankfull for the wonderful friends I have found here!! WhtDove...Sometimes I am glad that things dont always come out the way I want them to, other times I hate it, this was one time I was glad it came out how it did. If I didnt write this, who knows what I would have done *grin*------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Whew...feels great to get all that anger out doesn't it? Applauds you for your release |
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Blue Eyed Wanderer Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 84Rhode Island, US |
I can relate way too much, but this was awesome! I wish I was able to get things out as good as you can! ~Jess~ |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Hoot...Felt good at the time, but now, I dunno, kind of wish I didn't Jess...Yeah, usually I can't let anything out so don't let this one poem fool ya, I am usually not one for letting my feelings out! But sometimes it happens. Like I said, I was going to write about something totally different, but this is what came out. Thanks for reading! ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
This was truly a magnificent rush of emotion that you word-played so well. It really is a healing to get these things out. Otherwise they sit in your heart and fester and you don't deserve that. You are wonderful talent and a real sweetheart. Get it all out and go on to find your happiness. Sometimes the best revenge is success. And you are a poetic success. ------------------ If you love me like music, I'll be your song. ~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Geez... did I write this? LOL... just kidding. Wish I did. I meant every word you said. Nice going, Melanie. ;-) |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Wild...Hmmmm, poetic success?? NO, I dont think so, but your opinion is probably more valuable than mine, so who am I to argue?!?! Doreen...Maybe it WAS you that wrote it. I don't know if I want to claim it anymore. I think it was a mistake to write it...*sigh* I dunno anymore. ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Oh Echo...this is powerful, moving work. I'm glad you had the guts to let the pain out. I aplaud you on your immense strenth. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I walk with the multitude, yet alone am I in their midst. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
This is a powerful poem. I felt the anger, but I also felt the survivor's victory as well, way to go, Echo. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW!! Echo, this is so powerful. A great way to let it out, well done ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Hey there Echo, Wow - what an awesome poem. I can relate to everything that you wrote and have quite a few poems very similar to that. I'll share them with you sometime. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Echo...I think I should have phrased it differently maybe, but I don't feel poetic success can be measured in monetary terms but in terms of how you relate your emotions and pain etc. to the written word and in that respect you are an awesome success!!! You have a talent that sings and you use it very well and so imho you are a success. ------------------ If you love me like music, I'll be your song. ~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Alwye...Thanks Ohme...I don't know if there is much victory, but thanks! Dark Angel...Thanks Moonshine...If you wish! I would love to read anything I didn't write. WildChild...I think a poetic success was phrased better only because that is a little more believable to me than me being a success. Im no success...The only thing I can do half way decent is draw...ask WhtDove. But thanks ... I just personally do not see myself as a success...in any way! ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
You go girl!! Get all the venom out it does no good keeping it in. And that is a good expressive way to do it, rather than have a mental fit. So sorry for all you've been through.------------------ How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool? ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Isis...No need to be sorry, wasn't your fault...twas mine. As for geting "all" the venom out...well, I in no way got it all out, thats just the begining of the "story"...anyways...thanks for reading. ------------------ ~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~ |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Dearest Echo... This is truly awesome! I felt every word, in fact it gave me a "rush" just reading it  I thank you for letting us all see this... You dont know how much you spoke for more than just yourself in one way or another!!  I hope you can find peace soon, you come accross as such a creative person in all your works... Get creative and "have some fun" figuring out what you need to do with your feelings. This is what works for me, makes it easier to think about I think :P Great work ------------------ Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be |
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