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Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA

0 posted 1999-10-23 10:05 PM


@#$% you for hurting me
and scarring me for life.
For making my life so miserable
that I turned to the knife.

@#$% you for betraying me
and taking all my trust.
For what I thought was love
you told me was just lust.

@#$% you for raping me
and threatening me not to tell.
For you took something innocent
and brought it all to hell.

@#$% you for beating me
and saying I brought it on.
For the marks you left behind
are so far from being gone.

@#$% you all for everything
even the ones I didn't say.
For what you all have done
slowly kills me everyday!


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~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~


© Copyright 1999 Echo Rhayne - All Rights Reserved
Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

1 posted 1999-10-23 10:11 PM


Your anger and pain shows through well one this one.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
2 posted 1999-10-23 10:14 PM


I applaude you Echo, for releasing like this! This is awesome and powerful to say the least! What a way to let it out, huh? I bet it felt good to write something like this....You go girl! (clapping!) BRAVO !!!!

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale


Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
3 posted 1999-10-23 10:21 PM


Watcher...I was totally going to write about something different but this is what came out when I started to write. I guess I needed to get it out

PFF...Yeah after I wrote it, I felt better. I wasnt going to post it, but I decided to do it anyways.

Thanks for reading!!


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~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~


Julie
Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739
Houston, TX
4 posted 1999-10-23 10:43 PM


Bravo Echo! Writing out the anger is a big step in healing...You're flyin' girl.

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Julie
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Almost all our misfortunes in life come from the wrong notions we have about the things that happen to us.
>Stendhal



Marilyn
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 1999-10-23 10:46 PM


Bravo to you for having the guts to show this. This is therapy and I have used it many times myself. You have the right attitude. They are the ones the need to be left behind. You show them be being better then they could ever be. You have friends here that will help you. I can see that in the support they give in their posts. Believe me it does get better. Thanks for sharing.
WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
6 posted 1999-10-23 10:50 PM


Well, I'm glad you decided to post it! The feelings come out quite well here. Good for you, it has a way of doing that don't it? Something you set out to do and something else comes along. GREAT JOB SWEETIE!! Bravo to you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
7 posted 1999-10-23 10:56 PM


Julie...Flying high!!

Marilyn...Thanks for reading and responding. I am thankfull for the wonderful friends I have found here!!

WhtDove...Sometimes I am glad that things dont always come out the way I want them to, other times I hate it, this was one time I was glad it came out how it did. If I didnt write this, who knows what I would have done *grin*


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~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~


hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
8 posted 1999-10-24 11:06 AM


Whew...feels great to get all that anger out doesn't it? Applauds you for your release
Blue Eyed Wanderer
Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 84
Rhode Island, US
9 posted 1999-10-24 02:25 PM


I can relate way too much, but this was awesome! I wish I was able to get things out as good as you can!
~Jess~

Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
10 posted 1999-10-24 05:35 PM


Hoot...Felt good at the time, but now, I dunno, kind of wish I didn't

Jess...Yeah, usually I can't let anything out so don't let this one poem fool ya, I am usually not one for letting my feelings out! But sometimes it happens. Like I said, I was going to write about something totally different, but this is what came out.

Thanks for reading!


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~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~


PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
11 posted 1999-10-24 05:52 PM


This was truly a magnificent rush of emotion that you word-played so well. It really is a healing to get these things out. Otherwise they sit in your heart and fester and you don't deserve that. You are wonderful talent and a real sweetheart. Get it all out and go on to find your happiness. Sometimes the best revenge is success. And you are a poetic success.

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If you love me like music, I'll be your song.
~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie


doreen peri
Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
12 posted 1999-10-24 06:06 PM


Geez... did I write this? LOL... just kidding. Wish I did. I meant every word you said.

Nice going, Melanie.
;-)

Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
13 posted 1999-10-24 09:57 PM


Wild...Hmmmm, poetic success?? NO, I dont think so, but your opinion is probably more valuable than mine, so who am I to argue?!?!

Doreen...Maybe it WAS you that wrote it. I don't know if I want to claim it anymore. I think it was a mistake to write it...*sigh* I dunno anymore.


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~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~


Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
14 posted 1999-10-24 10:06 PM


Oh Echo...this is powerful, moving work. I'm glad you had the guts to let the pain out. I aplaud you on your immense strenth.

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*Krista Knutson*

I walk with the multitude, yet alone am I in their midst. -- Daniel L. Miller


Ohme
Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816
Texas
15 posted 1999-10-24 11:01 PM



This is a powerful poem. I felt the anger, but I also felt the survivor's victory as well, way to go, Echo.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

16 posted 1999-10-26 07:33 AM


WOW!! Echo, this is so powerful. A great way to let it out, well done

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Moonshine
Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265
Australia
17 posted 1999-10-26 10:19 PM


Hey there Echo,

Wow - what an awesome poem. I can relate to everything that you wrote and have quite a few poems very similar to that. I'll share them with you sometime.

PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
18 posted 1999-10-27 03:53 AM


Echo...I think I should have phrased it differently maybe, but I don't feel poetic success can be measured in monetary terms but in terms of how you relate your emotions and pain etc. to the written word and in that respect you are an awesome success!!! You have a talent that sings and you use it very well and so imho you are a success.

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If you love me like music, I'll be your song.
~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie


Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
19 posted 1999-10-27 04:21 PM


Alwye...Thanks

Ohme...I don't know if there is much victory, but thanks!

Dark Angel...Thanks

Moonshine...If you wish! I would love to read anything I didn't write.

WildChild...I think a poetic success was phrased better only because that is a little more believable to me than me being a success. Im no success...The only thing I can do half way decent is draw...ask WhtDove. But thanks ... I just personally do not see myself as a success...in any way!



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~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~


Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
20 posted 1999-10-27 07:15 PM


You go girl!! Get all the venom out it does no good keeping it in. And that is a good expressive way to do it, rather than have a mental fit. So sorry for all you've been through.

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How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool?
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)



Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
21 posted 1999-10-28 01:18 AM


Isis...No need to be sorry, wasn't your fault...twas mine. As for geting "all" the venom out...well, I in no way got it all out, thats just the begining of the "story"...anyways...thanks for reading.


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~*~ Time erases and rewrites all the lines. What remains is the poetry! ~*~


ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
22 posted 1999-10-28 03:18 AM


Dearest Echo...
This is truly awesome! I felt every word, in fact it gave me a "rush" just reading it I thank you for letting us all see this... You dont know how much you spoke for more than just yourself in one way or another!! I hope you can find peace soon, you come accross as such a creative person in all your works... Get creative and "have some fun" figuring out what you need to do with your feelings. This is what works for me, makes it easier to think about I think :P Great work

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Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be

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