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darksideofthesun Junior Member
since 1999-10-21
Posts 12 |
cut the deck and deal it blind transparent's hard to have to find ice is warm when we are cold invisible's hard to have to hold smiles hard enough to bequeath when there's nothing underneath hard to have faith in things above when there's nothing left to love sleep, baby, sleep the days seem longer when you weep cry, baby, cry the river rages, bleeding dry it's hard enough to be a saint when everyone has lost the faith hard enough to face the fears when the illusions disappear hush, now, bow your head there are worse things yet to dread. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Interesting. Quite a disturbing lullaby. --Kess ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Liked this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I do very much like the theme of this work. i was just wondering if the meter is different on purpose? I found myself stumbling at some places. I am no expert on meter, I jst wondered if it was done on purpose? |
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darksideofthesun Junior Member
since 1999-10-21
Posts 12 |
actually, this was just one of those poems i started writing in the middle of 2nd period geometry and once i started, things just came popping into my head. im trying to figre out some music to maybe turn it into a song, but i kindof shifted the meter's a bit and even im not quite sure why. still working on it- if you could provide suggestions/advice, let me know!thanks!!! |
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