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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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Familiar Hands You're bedroom door opens one night. A silhouette stands in the light. A child squeezing a teddy bear, You can't quite see who's standing there. But in they come, closing the door. Now darkness is there, nothing more. Till someone sits down by your side, As innocense goes the wayside. A soft whisper, a well known voice Tells you in this you have no choice. A touch no child understands, A stranger with familiar hands. Holding your fears over your head, Your sole torment becomes the bed. So you let them have what they must, Vowing never again to trust. You writhe in fear, you become shame, You hate the face behind your name. "You brought this on yourself", you're told. You carry those words till you're old. Then one day upon your vacant stare, In the mirror, seeing no-one there. You realize emotion's dead. You long for love, live in it's dread. What you need, you hate to think of, The touch of someone that you love. To look in eyes, believe they care, To expose your body to share. Now look at you, you're thirty two, And still those hands are touching you. What could you possibly do when, You were merely a child of ten? ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 10-23-1999).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Poignant portrayal my friend, of many aspects of this vile act and it's consequences extending into the future from the past. I am well sated in my need for Darkness with this piece. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I'm not sure what to say to this piece. Very vivid. Rage, fear, hate all ran through me as I read this. Well written Dark Lord. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
There is no crime more horrific and no punishment severe enough for the offender. Good writing, Michael. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sad and painful. And very well done. ------------------ Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michael: you touched a place in me that understands how hard it is to tell this pain, and you have said it with remarkable clarity. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Wow, is all I can say Michael, as I shake my head in sorrow. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Well done portrayal of a hideous act. ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You've written well, my friend - It is indeed a terrible burden that many too many people comprehend and live with... Nice work.. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Michale, this sickens me not in it's portrayal, but in the act itself. Nothing anyone should have to go through |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh Michael...You amaze me at how you can take such a horrific subject, and create something for others to read and learn from. (sigh) This brings awareness like nothing else could. Thank you.... |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This is a very real telling of a very horrifying experience. I agree with Mr. Balladeer: no punishment is too great for these foul creatures playing at humanity. This will pluck the strings of many a heart, sir. Good poetry. --Kesslynne ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Michael: You just brought tears to my eyes.. Big hugs ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
GRRRRRRRR lemme at em! Great poem, my best friend in school was abused by her father during "NAP TIME" which her mother sanctioned. It wrecked her life, but she has pulled through. The CREEP (now I'm all hmmmm sad for her again...this brought back alot of emotions that I experienced when she first told me when we were 14.....) Much Luv Izzzzy |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You've portrayed this well! They will someday answer for what they did. No one deserves this! Excellent job in writing in this!!! |
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Deverone Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136San Antonio, Tx, USA |
This brought a chill up my spine to think that a child would ever have to endure such a beastly act. GREAT WORK. (Even though it is very sad.) Your writing are very good and extremely descriptive.....kinda takes the reader into your thoughts. LOVE reading your stuff though. ------------------ Deverone "We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out". ----Ray Bradbury--- |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
I'll just say I know this all to well! Except for the 32 part. You wrote about it nicely though! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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