»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #3
»
Gone Away
| Open Poetry #3 |
|
Gone Away |
|
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Where have all my feelings gone? Cold winds blasting. Where have all my feelings gone? Gone, gone away. In my heart, no words can stir, Those warmest feelings. I do truely long for them. Gone, gone away. I am lost no one can find, My deepest recess. My heart is cold, alone to die. Gone, gone away. Heat they try to light anew, A hopeless pass time. Emotionless to any cue. Gone, gone away. I must face the barest truth, Love's light passing. Alone again to struggle through. Gone, gone away. This heart is cold, forever lost, No time burning. Turned to stone, no more to cry. Gone, gone away. |
||
| © Copyright 1999 Marilyn - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
How sad this is Marilyn. It seemed like a song that has played in my heart before. You really captured the mood of dispair. |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Martie.....This is how I am feeling. I tried in several forms to express how I am feeling now. I failed and ranted in prose. Then I stumbled upon this and it just flowed from my mind and my heart. |
||
|
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Marilyn, I'm really sorry you are feeling this way. You have too many good qualities to give up hope. Please reconsider. |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, Marilyn. Great expression of emptiness, of loosing those special feelings for someone. This says it all and very well. ------------------ Denise |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
My dear Balladeer. Hope I always have but reality is where I live. I shall always hope and dream but it the reality of love I wish to taste. I have forgotten how to feel my friend. Denise..Thankyou. |
||
|
Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Look inside your heart,you'll find the embers there still.Just build it slowly and a roaring fire you'll soon have.Well done verse.  ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Watcher.....I hope you are right my friend. The coldness is difficult to deal with. I am naturally a warm person and this nothingness I feel is depressing. |
||
|
Richard 33 Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 187glen easton, wv usa |
Good heart felt words, good poem, I have felt this way before, ya just got to keep believing, especially in yourself!!!!! |
||
|
PoeticPreacher Junior Member
since 1999-10-20
Posts 28jkljkj |
Hats off to you sistah for being real. This is a well written word. Your hope has been deferred and it has made you heart sick. For encouragement, I leave with you a piece from my favorite poet...David Hope deferred makes the heart sick: but when the desire comes...it is a tree of life. Proverbs 13:12 Luv Ya Marilyn |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Richard....Thankyou for you words, I will try to live them. Preacher.....Real is all I know how to be. thankyou for the words of David. There are times when one just forgets or can not see through the darkness. I look for the desire to come friend. |
||
|
DanMc Junior Member
since 1999-10-24
Posts 10Canada |
I,m speachless i wish u all the happiness in the world PS / when you have no faith in love / look for faith in God / God is love God will never give to much that you may not bear, even when you feel like he is not there Read the poem called footprints I do all the time, I have gone to three funerals in the past two years , my father , my grandfather and now this summer my uncle all which were dear to me .God has been there for me .he is there for you now. ------------------ Daniel McIntosh |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Dan..thankyou for your kind words. I have a deep faith in God and it has gotten me through many rough times. This is something I just have to get through. Time is what I need I guess. Again thanks for you time and your comments. |
||
|
Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Such a heartfelt piece! Marilyn, I have no words of wisdom befitting, but I do hope you find the part of you that will make you feel warm again. ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! |
||
|
sparrow Junior Member
since 1999-10-22
Posts 33 |
Reminds me of that old song "Where have all the cowboys gone" at the first, then turns into a wonderful and emotional work of art. ------------------ Sparrow Hawk Jester of http://www.scribedesigns.com/archflambeoth/ |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
pepper...gosh how far back did you have to go to retrieve this? I was surprised to see it on page one again. Thankyou for taking the time to find it and comment. Sparrow...It was written with the song "Where have all the flowers gone." in mind. I was having trouble putting my soul into words and when my mind happened on this song it flowed beautifully. |
||
|
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
So sad Marilyn, I know what it feels like to be there. My thoughts and prayers are with you. Hugs  Ruth |
||
|
Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Marilyn,I know how your feeling. There was a time when I never thought I'd feel anything again. Give it time. That worked for me. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
||
|
Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
So sad, Marilyn. I hope the sun will shine for you again very soon. |
||
|
Verma Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 80Midlands, England |
The words you speak, They make me feel weak...Thanks for sharing this one.. |
||
|
Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Deeply sad and moving..I can relate to this..wonderful, wonderful job. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I walk with the multitude, yet alone am I in their midst. -- Daniel L. Miller |
||
|
Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Ruth...Your prayers are greatly appreciated. Thankyou for being a friend. Amy...Time is something I have given much of to this problem, years. I need to be able to trust and I do not know how to do that. I am always looking for the shoe to drop and I hold back. I wish to learn how to change that part of me. Munda..thankyou for your kind words. Verma.....I am glad that this touched you. Alwye....Way too many people can relate to this piece. This says a lot about our society. This must change! [This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 10-26-1999).] |
||
|
Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Well done Marilyn. I know this feeling of nothingless too, it's just not you and there is nothing you can do. Just try to see the beauty around you, in people, in nature, in life etc. This piece spoke of my own similar feelings in times past. ------------------ How long after you are gone will ripples remain as evidence that you were cast into the pool? ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know how this feels |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
