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Tell me what you guys think of this please
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Tell me what you guys think of this please |
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Ton New Member
since 1999-10-22
Posts 1 |
My Sky Sometimes I think you are an agel from the sky I wonder fi you've come from way up high I wish you were mine i would be the luckiest guy You make me feel like I can fly i wish you were with me in my sky but for now you'r with some other guy wy up high in his sky when you're with me i see a fire in your eye i wish you were with me in my sky your so beautiful i could cry you are the only girl i want in my sky it almosy makes me cry when i thik of you with some other guy i wish you were with me in my sky when i am around you i feel like no ordinary guy i would be the best to you that is no lie i wish you were with me in my sky |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
In my opinion...i liked the message in this but the rhyming could use a little work or maybe it rhymed too much...all in all...i liked it...i hope to be reading more from you in the future  ************************ starboards ------------------ "If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was" |
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