Spring sprung (let me know what you think)

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Open Poetry #3

Spring sprung (let me know what you think)

Master
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since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 1999-10-21 11:36 PM

*this is a totaly new style that I desided to try, let me know what you think!

Spring sprung so unexpected
From melting snow
I stood in awe
Observed perfection of its flow
So flawlessly performed
Played by the notes
Deformed in form
So worthy of great words
And yet neglected
My soul alone became affected
Pecked by the rain
In gained commotion
And grain by grain
I drained emotion
From weeping lashes
In fitting fashion,
Gentle motion,
In passing rage
And raging passion
Unto the page

[This message has been edited by Master (edited 10-22-1999).]

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13

Posts 1606

1 posted 1999-10-22 02:20 PM

Good read,vivid imagery.Nicely done!

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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

2 posted 1999-10-22 03:49 PM

Thanks Watcher, glad you liked it!

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 1999-10-22 04:06 PM

I enjoyed the imagery in this one as well. I would like to know what the challenge was in this piece?

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

4 posted 1999-10-22 05:04 PM

There was no challege in this one, I just began to write and let the writing take me forward.

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