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This Inevitable Morning
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This Inevitable Morning |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The sun has turned the sky white and made all outlines sharp. Seeking out the shadows it lingers in all the dark corners and cold spots. The dark forbidden place of mushrooms brightens, the snake sleeps in the plain sight, the Black Widow has left her home, the Hibiscus opens bows its head then folds into death. The crow’s laughter fills the air. In the back room the shade is pulled but around the edges and through the tiny pin prick of a whole in the middle the sun beams exposing a dust ball in the corner and a stain on the carpet in the middle of that perfect pink rose. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow Martie, this is absolutely packed full of imagery...nicely written. I do, by the way, love thse three lines...supurb! "the Hibiscus opens bows its head then folds into death." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Good paint, good lines, well done. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
The visuals on this were right there!! Very good read! ------------------ If you love me like music, I'll be your song. ~Heart~ Dreamboat Annie |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Excellent read.Vivid imagery.  ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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