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Open Poetry #1

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MuseFaire
Junior Member

since 1999-06-27

Posts 12

0 posted 1999-07-04 06:13 PM

It's pale and complicated
in the light behind your eyes
and I feel as if I'm losing the ground
between the heaven and earth of us
too confused by the plight of my heart-
AndwhereamIinsideofthis?
stuck- out of time-floating inside too many feelings
feelings that drench me outward towards the edge
and grab at the hidden truth in me;

the silence of your eyes
begins with the loudness of my heart
and I am shook to the core of all that I am
running from the pull of your smile
the charm of your face
the beauty I see in your eyes.

And everything is this:
a desire so strong it eats at my will
a need so great it breaks us in two

But the friendship you give
can guide us through all of this
and give us a ground to stand on-

So hope is the silence that blooms in my heart
and goodbye is the freedom
I offer you now.

Genea
Member

since 1999-06-15

Posts 321
USA

1 posted 1999-07-04 11:24 PM

i liked ur technique of running all the words in that one line together. effective!

thursdayschild
Member

since 1999-07-01

Posts 169
Houston, Tx.

2 posted 1999-07-05 01:56 AM

Beautiful poem. Love the lines "the silence
of your eyes/begins with the loudness of
my heart" Truly speaks to this soul.
Thanks for sharing this great work!

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