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Open Poetry #1

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Christina Myers
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since 1999-06-21

Posts 159

0 posted 1999-07-04 10:22 AM

Your candy-appled tongue
graced my body with pleasure
and the rippled effect
took hold
and wrung my heart dry-

So as the water breaks
off the cliff of your hands
you soar
like the waves in my hair...
high above
and
lost in a cloud.

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And I thought: this is how poetry is born. It comes from invisible heights, it is secret and dark in its origins, solitary and fragrant, and like the river it will assimilate whatever falls in its current; it will seek a route between the mountains, and its crystalline song will ripple through the meadows."- Pablo Neruda

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite

since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

1 posted 1999-07-04 12:18 PM

Wow, I really liked the way your phrases flowed in this one. excellent!

Christina Myers
Member

since 1999-06-21

Posts 159

2 posted 1999-07-05 08:22 AM

thanks dreamer... and thank you for taking the time to read and remark on the poems I posted. It really means a lot.

-C

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

3 posted 1999-07-05 08:28 AM

Created with the precision of an artist of our craft. Well done, Christina. If we don't use words to the fullest of their abilities, then what's a meta-for?

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