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The Enemy - - a villanelle
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The Enemy - - a villanelle |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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I see him calmly standing there So confident and void of fear Mocking me with icy stare. Unable to escape his stare Of confidence combined with leer I see him calmly standing there. Sarcastic monster! How he dare To criticize my weak veneer Mocking me with icy stare. Remindful of an old nightmare Recurrent in my early years I see him calmly standing there. Fiend from darkness! How he bares My soul with evil grin so queer Mocking me with icy stare. I strike at him with hatred bare! But, through the shattered cracks of mirror, I see him calmly standing there Mocking me with icy stare. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Not to Worry - You're protected by......  BIG MAC!! |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You make this seem so easy...it's incredible (I bought a new Thesaurus so I can look up superlatives just for YOUR poetry). I struggled for days with mine and to read yours and know you have it memorized! I'm thinking of sticking my quill into the nearest goose!  |
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Genea Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 321USA |
Dug this gem out of the archives....what do u think folks? |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Nice digging Genea. Thanks for bring it to the surface. Sir Balladeer: We are our own worst enemy, Yes? As always, thanks for view. |
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IsabelleSkye Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 253 |
WOW I wanna write one! You did awesome my buggy friend *wink* Luvya! Izzyyyyyy ------------------ "I would rather sit on a pumpkin, and have it all to myself, than to be crowded on a velvet cushion." .....Henry David Thoreau |
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Delores Hall Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 342USA |
This is dark.But I like it. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I have been pretty fascinated with well-written villanelles and I like this one a lot. I struggle a bit to get the lines to flow the way I want and guess I need to practice more (sounds like playing the scales and chopsticks, huh). This is good - I really enjoyed it. A |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
thank you, Aziza. I've always been fascinated by the structure of the villanelle. Glad you enjoyed it.....here's another one I had written.. The headlines of the New York Times In their descent from bad to worse Will never print my favorite rhymes. In place of them horrendous crimes Form images both cruel and terse The headlines of the New York Times. With so much in our lives sublime A paper that dwells on violence and worse Will never print my favorite rhymes. They're pallbearers marching along in time After the money in your purse The headlines of the New York Times. So pass my book, my son, for I'm Quite sure that paper that I curse Will never print my favorite rhymes. I'll save my nickels and my dimes Invest them in a book of verse. The headlines of the New York Times Will never print my favorite rhymes. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
You know, I am liking that a lot. Makes me want to take an idea and give it a shot in Villanelle style. Going into the archives is a bit like looking at old family pictures or watching old movies ... I am seeing the cast as it is now, but have the opportunity to see them in the past too. I really appreciate how PiP has archived instead of keeping one huge section of poetry. Every night I read a couple of pages of poems in Archive 1 and marvel at those who are here still writing and sharing - and wonder why some who were quite good are not here. Interesting, huh. Thank you for sharing this Villanelle with me ~ I am off to draft my thoughts. A |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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