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The Sin (a companion to The Impenitent One")
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The Sin (a companion to The Impenitent One") |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
"Give me my sin again" She said with a sultry grin. I need to feel like before- The heat, the thrill, the icey chill- I want more. All I desire is in your eye I long to hear your passionate cry. I need to feel like before The rage, the kiss, the ardent bliss- I want more. All I can taste is your honey skin I long to feel your lusty sin. I need to feel like before- The pain, the pulse, the fevered impulse- I want more. All I need you give to me I must have the spirit to set me free. I need to feel like before The love, the longing, the sense of belonging I want more. (this is a prequel, sequel, companion to the one I posted earlier "The Impenitent One"... I'm not positive of its title as of yet, but for now it suits it well. They are two of a maybe short series...I'll be looking forward to seeing what everyone thinks!...~m~) ------------------ www.auburn.edu/~fergum1 ~*Only when it is dark enough can you see the stars*~ |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I like the erotic thread, I can almost feel your heart beating. ------------------ Patience is a virtue, but virtue has never been one of my redeeming qualities. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Moonlight, this has a wonder pace and tempo to create the mood of the poem. Part of a series, you say? I want to see more! |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
Thank You Dreamie  And Balladeer - thank you also! I wondered how well the tempo would do. Its kind of strange, but I thought it would be something different for a change.... Thanks for the comments! |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
And this as well. ------------------ I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say. |
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Enrique Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 52San Juan, PR |
Wonderful Poem, I love it. |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Wow Moonlight! I really like this one... the repetition of "I want more" works very well. Reminds me of my ex, I think that is her lifelong motto "I want more" |
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