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Moonlight
Member

since 1999-06-25

Posts 105
Auburn, Alabama USA

0 posted 1999-07-02 11:49 PM

The shades of pain await
For the last of her breath.
They hunger for her flesh -
Longing at last for her death.
The grin of their evil
Has flushed over their lips
And they wait in amusement until
Into the darkness she slips.
Oh how they've stroked her
And wished for her there.
They've been infatuated with
The sweet scent of her hair.
Her life is their plaything;
They toy with her intentions.
They tie up her mind
With desire of abstentions.
They crawl to the most silent
Places of her curiosity
To sew their darkend thread
Of impiety and animosity.
A more worthy partner?
They will find none
Because she is the sinner-
The impenitent one.

(moonlight does "dark")

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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

1 posted 1999-07-03 12:39 PM

Lovely darkness, I know where the sentiment comes from. I can really feel this one!!

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Patience is a virtue, but virtue has never been one of my redeeming qualities.

azblond
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since 1999-07-01

Posts 637
The Steamy Desert

2 posted 1999-07-03 12:43 PM

Shiver, Moonlight...what a haunting vision and an impending message. You made me want to say my prayers! Thanx for sharing!!

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Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

Moonlight
Member

since 1999-06-25

Posts 105
Auburn, Alabama USA

3 posted 1999-07-03 02:48 AM

Thanks for the comments,

I appreciate them. Read the companion piece to this one "The Sin"....

Moonlight
Member

since 1999-06-25

Posts 105
Auburn, Alabama USA

4 posted 1999-07-03 10:08 PM

just moving it up a little because i posted it so late last night...

thanx.

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

5 posted 1999-07-05 11:39 PM

I still love this piece.

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I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say.

elvira
Senior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

6 posted 1999-07-14 09:45 PM

"Would I were free from this restraint, or else had hope to win her!.....Would she could make of me a saint or I of her a sinner!"
a pleasure to bring this piece of darkness back to the top

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Tribute to M.J. ... My One and Only ... Childhood Memories ... your countenance ... hoarse whispers ... serving wench ... stolen hours ... devotion ... Master

Moonlight
Member

since 1999-06-25

Posts 105
Auburn, Alabama USA

7 posted 1999-07-14 10:51 PM

Thanks so much. I didn't get much commentary out of this one as I thought.

THank you for reading, Elvira!

Nemesis
New Member

since 1999-07-16

Posts 3
Bay St. Louis, MS, USA

8 posted 1999-07-16 12:25 PM

I believe this to be an exceptional work. The author of this poem is clearly gifted. Weaving words as delicately as a spider weaves her silken web. I look forward to many more.

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