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not sure what to name this....
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not sure what to name this.... |
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Joyfulltune Junior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 12 |
I need to know, why don’t you call? I need to know, do you care at all? I need to know, are we just nothing? I need to know, did we have something? I know we only shared one night. I know we both need someone right. I know you have a sorrowed past. I know that we can make this last. I wish I could be with you. I wish I knew just what to do. I wish the world was ours tonight. I wish for more than just one night. I want you to know, I’ve known you before, I want you to know I’d like to know more. I want you to know what happiness is I want you to know with another kiss. I love you. |
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owen Junior Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 19Toledo, WA USA |
im not sure what to call it either, but it sounds like sour love. |
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owen Junior Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 19Toledo, WA USA |
oh, and I forgot to mention that it was really good and I liked it. sometimes I can be so rude |
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Joyfulltune Junior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 12 |
not rude at all. I've never written poetry before 2 nights ago. so any criticism is welcome. =0) |
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Genea Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 321USA |
Joy, Read your poem to yourself....what emotion does it remind you of? Give it that name. [just a suggestion] ~Genea |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How about "know need"? Or "wishes, needs and wants"? Whatever you name it, I name it well-done! |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
enjoyed this |
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