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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 1999-06-23 09:23 AM


I remember well that moonlit night
My eyes were touched with a second sight
I had come to face a lonely death
To find my peace in a dying breath

As is the case so often thought
The last place I looked I would have caught
The one so long been searching for
High above the foam swept shore

I assumed I'd travelled everywhere
For one I know was always there
And in each eye a blazing star
This time they did not seem so far

She raised me high into her hands
Lifted me up and made me stand
To fly across the boundless skies
I could only stare into her eyes

Inside I saw where sorrow slept
So many tears that she had wept
Into the cold and salty sea
Never again to be for me

She set me down in a field of snow
Then i saw that she meant to go
Such a feeling to realize
The last I'd look into her eyes

I cried to the heavens from my soul
That she'd come back to make me whole
And as I screamed into the night
I saw two stars shining bright

And though my heart felt so hollow
I just knew I had to follow
The path that stretched far from view
The path that led me here to you

Standing so proud with you my love
Eyes as brilliant as those above
That keep there vigil forevermore
High above the foam swept shore



© Copyright 1999 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
Christina Myers
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since 1999-06-21
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1 posted 1999-06-23 10:26 AM


There is a Poe quality to this work....
I feel the need to dig up my battered copy of
his works....
again, sense of place and imagery are excellent- could almost feel the spray of the waters

-C

Nan
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2 posted 1999-06-30 11:37 AM


Hey you guys - Lookee how good this one is...

Gentle Soul
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3 posted 1999-07-23 02:04 AM


wow walt! so romantic.. and has a nice rythm.. I like it lots!

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Alwye
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4 posted 1999-07-23 02:09 AM


what can I say? Like a beautiful painting, only painted with the words from you...I really love this one.

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*Krista Knutson*

"It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter

~one voice~
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5 posted 1999-07-23 02:10 AM


Walt, I think you just keep getting better and better and better...like the energizer bunny! This is one is fabulous! And Christina is right...it does have a Poe quality to it...and you know how I love Poe! hehehehe

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."


Dragon
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6 posted 1999-07-23 09:08 AM


Beautiful Walt,WOW!
DreamEvil
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7 posted 1999-07-24 12:53 PM


Walt, now I WILL hold you to a higher standard. Very well done, my friend.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©



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8 posted 1999-07-24 04:01 PM


Again you prove your worth, friend Walt.
poetFemmeFatale
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9 posted 1999-07-25 09:48 PM


This paints such a wonderfully vivid picture...

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet


poetFemmeFatale
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10 posted 1999-08-30 09:25 AM


I just really like this , and must send it back......makes me feel all warm & fuzzy & Mystical......aaahhhh...Great job by the way! This thing was revived from page 45 !!

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale



wayoutwalt
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11 posted 1999-08-30 06:54 PM


i really should start thanking my poet friends more often this is onno muh faves nice to see it raised again thank you guys
WhtDove
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12 posted 2000-03-25 01:00 AM


I missed this and I'm glad you sent it my way. The best work I've seen from you! This was absoluetly fabulous Walt!!!!!!
cruz
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13 posted 2000-10-29 12:47 PM


There is a lot of substance here!  No carbon copy can be made of this one.  I've got more reactions to this one and a question.  Tell ya later,
cruz

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Florida's Foreverly Shores
14 posted 2001-02-17 04:39 PM


Walt~
Deserves a lift - and a

'And though my heart felt so hollow
I just knew I had to follow
The path that stretched far from view
The path that led me here to you'

Yep !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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